You Jin
The Game Synopsis There is the junkshop which was named ‘Cognoscenti Tool Junkshop’ and whose business hours were going to end. After the shopkeeper who was exhausted rang out the last customer and this place was empty, from this place nobody was in clearly came a tumult of noise. The cutting board named ‘Jo’ which was an once arrow, The shuriken named ‘Bi’ which was recycled by a pot of Japanese make And the knife named ‘Cal’ which was made of an iron ore such as a bullet. Their wonderful story is coming! “As you know, once I was…” The story of <iTool> goes on with the chatter of abandoned tools in this junk shop. It’s a behind story for the peoples who were known as classic heroes. Since the smartphone ‘Pon’ called an advanced smartphone a few months ago but now being treated as trash was there, the tools recollect their glorious past - All of their actions at the moment unperceived by people.
Oct 2, 2014 8:58 AM
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The Game Synopsis

There is the junkshop which was named ‘Cognoscenti Tool Junkshop’ and whose business hours were going to end.
After the shopkeeper who was exhausted rang out the last customer and this place was empty, from this place nobody was in clearly came a tumult of noise.
The cutting board named ‘Jo’ which was an once arrow,
The shuriken named ‘Bi’ which was recycled by a pot of Japanese make
And the knife named ‘Cal’ which was made of an iron ore such as a bullet.
Their wonderful story is coming!
“As you know, once I was…”
The story of <iTool> goes on with the chatter of abandoned tools in this junk shop.
It’s a behind story for the peoples who were known as classic heroes.
Since the smartphone ‘Pon’ called an advanced smartphone a few months ago but now being treated as trash was there, the tools recollect their glorious past - All of their actions at the moment unperceived by people.

 

 

The Game Synopsis

There is a junkshop  ( which was named ) called ‘Cognoscenti Tool Junkshop’  which was about to close for the day. and whose business hours were going to end.
After the exhausted shopkeeper who was exhausted rang out the last customer and left the now empty place , this place was empty, from this place nobody was in clearly there came a tumult of noise.

The noisemakers were the following.  <em>(I think that you need something here to introduce the items</em>)
The cutting board named ‘Jo’ which was once  an arrow,
The shuriken named ‘Bi’ which was a recycled  pot of Japanese make.
And the knife named ‘Cal’ which was made of an iron ore such as a bullet.

And the knife named 'Cal' made from the metal from a bullet.
Their wonderful story is coming!
“As you know, once I was…”
The story of <iTool> goes on with the chatter of abandoned tools in this junk shop.
It’s a behind story for the peoples who were known as classic heroes.<em> (this phrase is unusual but OK )</em>
Since the discarded older smartphone ‘Pon’ called an advanced smartphone a few months ago but now being treated as just  trash was there, the tools can recollect their glorious past - All of their actions at the moment unperceived by people.

 

Notes:

It is correct to say "which was named" in your first sentence. However an English writer would just say "called". But you are not incorrect, it is just the normal way an English writer would phrase.

 

And Korean speakers and English speakers react in different ways to negative expression (thinking about my you are not incorrect )

 

For example

You are not going ? You might say "yes" to agree to the negative. I would say "no" to answer the question.

October 2, 2014
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