If it is possible, please correct my mistakes. My Favorite City for Life

I would actually like to live in California. I like there weather. A lot of Iranian people live there and they are successful people. People have a lot of opportunity to advance. For example people can find better job with a good salary. In addition they can have the freedom to express their opinions and a free life style. Also people can have many choices for having fun! I think if I can go there I can improve my knowledge more,because there are more motivations and courses there. I know Iranian psychologists who are there and I like them a lot so I can join them ;).
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If it is possible, please correct my mistakes. My Favorite City for Living in

I would like to live in California in reality! I like their weather. A lot of Iranian people live there and they are successful people. People have a lot of opportunity to advance. For example, people can find a better job with a good salary. In addition, they can have freedom in (expressing their) opinion and in lifestyle. Also, people can have so very many choices for having fun! I think if I can go there, I can improve my knowledge more. In order that because there are more motivations and courses there (for me). I know Iranian psychologists who are there and I like them a lot so I can join them ;).
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