Who can help me to revise my TOEFL essay?

With the advent of 'The information age'; people are nowadays are exposed to an ocean of knowledge. NowaThese days, students have are given so many options about what they would like to study a wide range of choices to study. They can simply open the up a website and watch one of the many famous universities’ 'open-courses' to learn acquire professional knowledge. On the other hand, these progressive technologies technological advances may pose negatively affects on students, for the internet is full of temptations.enticements. Therefore, personally, I prefer do support the statement that teaching is harder nowadays than it was in the past.

First of all, Children are can be so easily distracted by various things. High technology products, such as sophisticated computers; iPads; smartphones, so easily grab the a childrens' attention from children. Recently, multitudes of myriad researches and news reports concentrate on the issue of children overspendingplaying their time with iPad or computer games. Not only do can electronic devices exert harm to the  a childrens' health;, but also they reduce the time that the students teenagers have to spend on their studiesy. In China, some teachers have forbidden their students to takinge smart phones in to school, in order to reduce using of smartphones usage in class. Teachers frequently find that students, are facing various temptations in from the virtual world. Such as;- usually communicate communicating with others via wechat, or keep reading the news or comments and feeds on from Facebook or , Twitter etc.... All these behaviors can severely affect their studiesy ability effect. Even In some cases, students even have used smartphones to cheat on in exams. Obviously, up-to-statedate modern electronic products devices can make teaching increasingly much more difficult, for it distracts students from their focus focusing on studying. <em>Well this is just my opinion on how it could be potentially altered to flow a little better. J. :)</em>

Do you agree or disagree Teaching is harder than it was in the past- 1

Who can help me to revise my TOFEL essay?

With the advent of information age, people nowadays are exposed to an ocean of knowledge. Nowadays, students have many options about what to study a wide range of choices to study. They can simply open the a website and watch famous universities’ open courses to learn acquire (Note: it is best to say that knowledge is "acquired" rather than "learnt") professional knowledge. On the other hand, these progressive technologies technological advances may pose negatively affects on students, for the internet is full of temptationsenticements. Personally, I prefer support (use support here; prefer should be use relative to something else, but there is no relative statement here) the statement that teaching is harder nowadays than the past. 

First of all, children are easily distracted by various things. High technology products, such as sophisticated computers, iPads, smartphones, easily grab the childrens' attention from children. Recently, multitudes of myriad researches and news reports concentrate on the issue of children overplaying iPad or computer games. Not only do electronic devices exert harm to the childrens' health, but also they reduce the time that teenagers spend on study. In China, some teachers forbid students to take smart phones to school, in order to reduce using of smartphones use in class. Teachers frequently find that students, facing various temptations in the virtual world, usually communicate with others via wechat, or keep reading the news on Facebook or Twitter. All these behaviors severely affect their studiesy effect. Even in some cases, students even use smartphones to cheat on in exams. Obviously, up-to-statedate electronic products make teaching much more difficult, for it distracts students from focusing on study.