Noah
Learning Japanese So I wrote this little introduction of mine. I wrote it in rōmaji since I am not that confident with writing japanese yet. Watashinonamaeha Noah to watashi wa Doitsu kara kitanda Watashi wa chokoreto kojo de hataraite imasu. Watashi wa daigaku no gakui o motte iru. Shumi wa dokusho to otobai ni noru sa rete iru. Watashi ga Nihon ni ryoko shi, itsutsu no gengo o hanashitai. I also uploaded a video of me speaking that: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=avJIAX4ognE
Oct 30, 2014 1:31 PM
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Watashino namae ha Noah deto (watashi wa) Doitsu kara kitanda (better:kimashita).

*"Doitsu kara kimashita" means "I came from Germany" and we imagine that you aren't in Germany now. In the case that you introduce you being in your country, I would say "watashi wa Doitsu shusshin desu (=I was born in Germany)" or "watashi wa Doitsu jin desu (=I'm a German)". 

*The particle "ha" is generally written with "wa" in roma-ji. I think writing it with "ha" is good, too, however, changing it to "wa" isn't good in one note. 

 

Watashi wa chokore-to koujou de hataraite imasu.
Watashi wa daigaku no gakui o motte iru (better: motteimasu).
Shumi wa dokusho to o-tobai ni noru koto desu sa rete iru.
Watashi waga Nihon ni ryokou shite, itsutsu no gengo (?) wo hanashitai desu. ("I want to speak 5 languages" ?) 

*It's not better not to mix up the formal and informal form so I made suggestions with the formal form. 


I also uploaded a video of me speaking that:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=avJIAX4ognE

 

 

Great job! You also tried to speak in Japanese, well done. I think speaking a bit more slowly and clearly would be better, please keep practicing. Good luck! I hope this was helpful. 

October 31, 2014
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