A Park
Every day after having my lunch, I take a walk in a park near my school. Being able to walk in such a beautiful park, one that is full of all types of flowers and various trees, is one of the most enjoyable things of my life here in Germany. Although Hamburg, unlike my native Korea, lacks mountains, its parks and nearby forests provides everyone with plenty of fresh air and a nature-friendly environment. While I definitely miss the closeness / proximity of mountains in Hamburg, I remain very satisfied with being able to stroll through its many wonderful parks.Good job! You express yourself well, and your sentences "flow" and are logical. Just improve your vocabulary as that will allow you to compose more descriptive, yet, concise sentences. I did not understand your fondness for mountains, but once I looked at your profile, it all made sense! Perhaps, you should mention this in your writing, as I have done above, to provide a frame of reference for the reader? I hope this helps! J.
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A Park
Every day after having a lunch, I take a walk in a park near my school. Taking a walk (<em>you can use a different word like stroll</em>) in a beautiful park full of all sorts many varieties of flowers and various trees is one of the most enjoyable things of my life in Germany. Although there is are no mountains in Hamburg, a lot of a multitude of parks and huge forests provide us with fresh air and a nature-friendly environment. I feel the lack of mountain Even though there are no mountains in Hamburg, but I am very satisfied with being able to stroll through the wonderful parks.