( part 1 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay? To begin with, I developed deep passion towards the industrial design field. I think that the decision about the future c

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( part 1 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay? To begin with, I developed deep passion towards the industrial design field. I think that the decision about the future career was also influenced by my love for technical products and for life. I pay very close attention to details of these things. I watch the composition of colors, different shapes, the materials, how they are packed. I am creating their image in my mind, thinking how I can use them. I believe that the products we use every day are very important part of our life, we simply cannot function without them. Although, they are something more than just practical tools, which enable the humanity to survive. The goods and their design could be very inspirational. In my eyes they are the masterpieces. I think that the professional industrial designs are the foundation on which we can develop disciplines like: art, economics, engineering and other fields crucial for the modern society.

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( part 1 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay?

To begin with, I developed deep passion towards the industrial design field. I think that the decision about my future career was also influenced by my love for technical products and for life. I pay very close attention to details of these things. I examine the importance of the composition of colors, different shapes, the materials and how they are packed. I am createing their an image in my mind, thinking how I can use them. I believe that the products we use every day are a very important part of our life, we simply cannot function without them. Although, They are something more than just practical tools, which enable the humanity to survive. The goods and their design could be very inspirational. In my eyes they are the masterpieces. I think that the professional industrial designs are the foundation on which we can develop disciplines like: art, economics, engineering and other fields crucial for the modern society.