Hola Pablo! Yo soy Jennifer. Mi español es muy malo, pero voy a tratar de ayudar.
"Hello boss, (Aquí, tú deberías poner el nombre de la jefe.)
I am writing this email with the reason for know the outcome of the analysis conducted dated 03.07.2014. (Estructura de la oración es muy confusa. Decir que como este: "This email is regaurding the analysis outcome done on 3/7/14.")
"The results showed that we have a problem with software updates from our teams. This is because the physical equipment (hardware) is outdated and upgrades are not supported. This issue concerns our engineer."
"My recommendation is to start with the Proliant Server or Router either because it at this time is the most critical part of our network."
"Attached is the full report.
Can you please confirm that this is the correct receipt of this email?"
(Mueva este a el fondo.)
"I will be attentively awaiting to your response. It would also be great if we could coordinate a meeting this week."