Pablo
Email for boss Hello guys my name is pablo morales and this is my work for the English branch 5 all this is hypothetical.... "Hello boss I am writing this email with the reason for know the outcome of the analysis conducted dated 03.07.2014. The results showed that we have a problem with software updates from our teams, this is because the physical equipment (hardware) are already old and upgrades are not supported. in fact our engineer has concerned about this issue lately. My recommendation is to make an investment in new equipment to our office. There has been an analysis of the actual condition of the equipment and you really need to upgrade are: -Server Proliant (Office 13) US $ 1,300 -Router (Office 32) US $ 2,500 -Acces-Point (Office 13) US $ 600 -Switch (Server Farm) US$800 Total investment is US $ 5,200 My recommendation is to start with the Proliant Server or Router either because at this time is the most critical part of our network. I will be attentive to your response, I would also like to coordinate a meeting this week. attached the full report. Please confirm the correct receipt of this email Saluda atte.Pablo Morales" Thank you
Nov 23, 2014 5:42 PM
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Hola Pablo! Yo soy Jennifer. Mi español es muy malo, pero voy a tratar de ayudar.


"Hello boss, (Aquí, tú deberías poner el nombre de la jefe.)
I am writing this email with the reason for know the outcome of the analysis conducted dated 03.07.2014. (Estructura de la oración es muy confusa. Decir que como este: "This email is regaurding the analysis outcome done on 3/7/14.")

"The results showed that we have a problem with software updates from our teams. This is because the physical equipment (hardware) is outdated and upgrades are not supported. This issue concerns our engineer."

 

"My recommendation is to start with the Proliant Server or Router either because it at this time is the most critical part of our network."


"Attached is the full report.
Can you please confirm that this is the correct receipt of this email?"


(Mueva este a el fondo.)

"I will be attentively awaiting to your response. It would also be great if we could coordinate a meeting this week."

November 23, 2014
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