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A boat trip (lettter) Dear Kate, I think a trip with your students would be an amazing idea! Like you know, I went to a boat trip a few weeks ago and had lots of fun, so I `d recommend you that. The perfect time to go is 8 a.m. because there will be not as many people as there may be in another time. By the time you arrive, the first stop could be visiting the castle. In addition, it´s allowed a guided tour, so your pupils will enjoy it before the lunch time. In accordance with this, you´d better go for a picnic because they will enjoy the surrounding scenery. After that, it would be a good idea taking your group to the lake and practicing water sports such as water polo or swimming races. Finally, you could get this for a reduced price if the group is formed by at least 15 people. Let me know what you think. Love, Carlos.
Nov 23, 2014 11:40 PM
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A boat trip (lettter)

Dear Kate,
I think a trip with your students would be an amazing idea!
Like As you know, I went to on a boat trip a few weeks ago and had lots of fun, so I`d recommend that to you that.
The perfect time to go is 8 a.m. because there will be not as many people as there may be in at another time. By the time you arrive, the first stop could be visiting the castle. In addition, it´s allowed it includes a guided tour, so your pupils will enjoy it before the lunch time. In accordance with this, you´d better go for a picnic because they will enjoy the surrounding scenery.
After that, it would be a good idea taking to take your group to the lake and practicing water sports such as water polo or swimming races.
Finally, you could get this for a reduced price if the group is formed by consists of at least 15 people.
Let me know what you think.
Love,
Carlos.

November 24, 2014

A boat trip (lettter)

Dear Kate,
I think a trip with your students would be an amazing idea!
Like you know, I took part in a boat trip a few weeks ago and I had lots of fun, so I `d recommend you to try it.
The perfect time to go is at 8 a.m. because there will be not as many people as there may be later in the evening or afternoon.
By the time you arrive, the first stop could be visiting the castle. In addition, it´s allowed a guided tour, so your pupils will enjoy it before the lunch time. In accordance with this, you´d better go for a picnic because they will be surrounded by the amazing scenery.
After that, it would be great to take your group to the lake and practicing water sports such as water polo or swimming races.
Finally, you could get all this for a reduced price as long as the group is formed by at least 15 people.
Let me know what you think.
Love,
Carlos, el de los c****** largos

(Evita repetir palabras, como idea o will enjoy (2 veces en lineas seguidas), y en vez de this o that o pronombres como it, da informacion especifica y pon mas adjetivos, eso no te lo van a corregir los nativos, pero te quita puntos, no va solo de escribirlo correcto). Quejas aqui: --->.....<----

November 24, 2014
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