anny.liu
My unpleasent journey to work these two days Normally it is 30-minute bus ride from my home to my workplace. However, it took more than an hour yesterday morning, when the bus I took was stuck in heavy traffic.It went on for a few seconds, stopped, then drove a couple of mintues, and then stopped again. This drive-and-stop situation lasted for almost 45mintues. As it was peak time, everyone was in a rush and the vehicles were struggling to move their way for themselves, which made the traffic even worse. At last our bus drove out of the jam and got to the stop where I got off. Of course, I started work late. This morning, to avoid the same situation, I got up 20minutes earlier. The traffic was good and I arrived at my workplace early.
Nov 25, 2014 12:06 AM
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My unpleasent journey to work these last two days

Normally it is a 30-minute bus ride from my home to my workplace. However, it took more than an hour yesterday morning, when the bus I took was stuck in heavy traffic.  It The bus [1] went on moved [1] for a few seconds, stopped, then drove for a couple of mintues minutes, and then stopped again. This drive-and-stop [2] situation lasted for almost 45 mintues minutes. As it was peak time, everyone was in a rush and the vehicles were struggling to move their way for themselves [3], which made the traffic even worse.

At last our bus drove out of the jam and got to the stop where I got off. Of course, I started work late. This morning, to avoid the same situation, I got up 20 minutes earlier. The traffic was good and I arrived at my workplace early.

 

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[1] The most recent 'thing' you described was the heavy traffic.  This means the pronoun 'it' seems to refer to the heavy traffic, and "it went on for a few seconds" suggests that the traffic jam lasted a few seconds.  Since this is not your meaning, I have replaced the ambiguous pronoun with "the bus".

[2] A common expression is "stop-and-start".

[3] Sorry, but I don't understand the meaning of this phrase.

 

Your writing is very good.  Your understanding of the use of hyphens and commas is better than many native speakers.  Great job!

November 25, 2014
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