José Santacruz
Trough The Darkness (PART 5) When I heard it I couldn’t believe my ears! My heart stopped for a second and I felt like I was about to fall down. “Officer, you are wrong, I haven’t done anything like that in my life” I said. I was surrounded by that time. “You were seen by a couple as you shot a man getting out of his car. Apparently , it looked like his car was having mechanical problems” the officer said still pointing his gun at me. I held my head with both hands and shook it from side to side. I kept telling to myself this can’t be true over and over again. An ambulance passed near us extremely fast, as I heard the siren I had a flashback. Somehow I started to remember everything. It was disturbing. I remembered how I was so depressed at home. I had no job. I was divorced. I was alone watching a stupid TV commercial on a Friday night. It was raining heavily. I remembered that I was drinking a cheap wine in the couch... It all started when I came to know that my ex-wife had rebuilt her life. She was dating a businessman called Charles. Apparently, their relationship was going so well that they had plans of getting married soon. I couldn’t believe it. It was driving me crazy everyday. I started to investigate Charles. I was obsessed with the idea of finding out what made him so important to Marie. What did he have that I didn’t? Why Marie had changed me? I could find a lot of information about him soon, he was a well-known and important businessman of Cincinnati. That stormy night I decided to do something insane. Something that I never thought I was going to do ever in my life. The idea had been going around my mind for a couples of weeks before that night. I think it was the alcohol that gave me the courage to finally do it. Maybe it was the anger. I couldn’t resist it anymore. I had to do something about it, regardless of whether it was good or bad. Sadly, I chose the worst. Charles worked for a huge international enterprise. He was the head of the accounting department. He worked till 10 PM on weekdays but didn't return home before midnight. Having said that (and don't ask me how I obtained all this information because I'm pretty good at investigating other people's life) this is how I committed the crime: It was 11:30 PM I had drunk all the wine and broken the empty bottle. Even though I wasn’t dizzy I had cut myself with a piece of glass when I had a kind of hysteria attack. The weather was perfectly bad. TO BE CONTINUED!
Nov 25, 2014 1:31 AM
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<em>Hola José! Tony's notes are perfect. Here are a couple of expressions we use all the time. :-)</em>

 

“Officer, you are wrong, I haven’t done anything like that in my life,” I said.

<em>Decimos: "I've never done anything like that in my (entire) life." </em>

 

An ambulance passed near us extremely fast.

<em>An ambulance raced by (us). = An ambulance passed by very closely going very quickly.</em>

 

The idea had been going around my mind for a couples of weeks before that night.

<em>This makes perfect sense. Pero es más natural decir: "The idea had been stuck in my head," o "The idea had been racing around my mind," o "The idea had been gnawing at me for a couple of weeks." The last one is my favorite. It means you can't get rid of the idea + the idea is causing you some stress / anxiety.</em>

 

He worked till 10 PM on weekdays but didn't return home before midnight.

<em>Here, I think it's better to use the word "until." In written English, we only shorten it ('till) when we use it as speech. Por ejeplo:</em>

 

<em>The park is open until 9 o'clock every night.</em>

<em>Raquel stayed until morning. </em>

<em>He had to sit at the table until he had finished his supper.</em>

 

<em>BUT! Once you make it speech you can use 'till all you want.</em>

 

<em>"Mom says the park is open 'till 9."</em>

<em>"Did you hear about Raquel? She was there 'till morning."</em>

<em>"Young man, you will sit at this table 'till you have finished your supper."</em>

 

Even though I wasn’t dizzy I had cut myself with a piece of glass when I had a kind of hysteria attack.

<em>Usamos: "When I had a (kind of) panic attack."</em>

 

<em>:-) :-) </em>

November 25, 2014
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Through the Darkness (PART 5)

When I heard it, I couldn’t believe my ears! My heart stopped for a second and I felt like I was about to fall down. “Officer, you are wrong, I haven’t done anything like that in my life,” I said. I was surrounded by that time. “You were seen by a couple as you shot a man getting out of his car. Apparently, it looked like his car was having mechanical problems,” the officer said still pointing his gun at me. I held my head with both hands and shook it from side to side. I kept telling to myself this can’t be true over and over again.

An ambulance passed near us extremely fast, and as I heard the siren I had a flashback. Somehow I started to remember everything. It was disturbing. I remembered how I was so depressed at home. I had no job. I was divorced. I was alone watching a stupid TV commercial on a Friday night. It was raining heavily. I remembered that I was drinking a cheap wine on the couch... (in the couch = dentro del sofá)

It all started when I came to know that my ex-wife had rebuilt her life. She was dating a businessman called named Charles. Apparently, their relationship was going so well that they had plans to get of getting married soon. I couldn’t believe it. It was driving me crazy every day. (every day = cada día, everyday = cotidiano) I started to investigate Charles. I was obsessed with the idea of finding out what made him so important to Marie. What did he have that I didn’t? Why Marie had changed me? (Why had Marie rejected me?)  I could was able to find out a lot of information about him soon.  He was a well-known and important businessman of Cincinnati. That stormy night I decided to do something insane. Something that I never thought I was ever going to do ever in my life. The idea had been going around my mind for a couples of weeks before that night. I think it was the alcohol that gave me the courage to finally do it. Maybe it was the anger. I couldn’t resist it anymore. I had to do something about it, regardless of whether it was good or bad. Sadly, I chose the worst.

Charles worked for a huge international enterprise. He was the head of the accounting department. He worked till 10 PM on weekdays but didn't return home before midnight. Having said that (and don't ask me how I obtained all this information because I'm pretty good at investigating other people's lives). This is how I committed the crime: it was 11:30 PM when I had drunk all the wine and broken the empty bottle. Even though I wasn’t dizzy I had cut myself with a piece of glass when I had a kind of hysteria attack. The weather was perfectly bad. (perfectly awful)

TO BE CONTINUED!

November 25, 2014
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