Amateur Thieves Three muggers ended up beaten up after trying to commit an armed robbery. They had managed to enter a flat and pointed the residents with their guns. On seeing themselves threatened, t

Carlos Suárez

Amateur Thieves Three muggers ended up beaten up after trying to commit an armed robbery. They had managed to enter a flat and pointed the residents with their guns. On seeing themselves threatened, the residents handed over all the money they had to the thieves. All was going very well to the muggers until the victims realized that the guns were fake. As the victims outnumbered the thieves, they began to hit them, first in the flat and then outside. The thieves tried to get away, but they were caught and brutally hit. When the police arrived, the thieves were badly injured and one of them had to be taken to hospital.

Nov 25, 2014 10:54 PM

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Amateur Thieves

Three muggers ended up beaten up after trying to commit an armed robbery. They had managed to enter a flat and pointed at the residents with their guns. On seeing themselves threatened, the residents handed over all the money they had to the thieves. All was going very well to for the muggers until the victims realized that the guns were fake. As the victims outnumbered the thieves, they began to hit them, first in the flat and then outside. The thieves tried to get away, but they were caught and brutally hitbeaten. When the police arrived, the thieves were badly injured and one of them had to be taken to the hospital.

"ended up beaten up" is grammatically correct (past participle) but "ended up beat up" sounds more natural to me. Not sure why!

Also at the end, "beaten" seems like a better word choice -- it's more of a process, and it might include kicking, scratching, slapping, whatever, whereas "hit" is a fairly specific word.

Overall, your writing is very clear and shows great sentence variety and structure. Fantastic!

November 26, 2014

Thank you very much!

November 25, 2014

Two very small things: first, "all was going very well FOR the muggers..." and second, when you write "they began to hit them, first in the flat and then outside", I expect the two locations to be parts of the body, not locations! The grammar is not wrong, but it sounds...unexpected.

November 25, 2014

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