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Practice 6 Hold a lecture on healthcare You are the manager of the Human Resources Department and you have invited a famous doctor to give a lecture on healthcare. Write a note to all staff: -introducing the speaker. -explaining the purpose of the lecture. -giving the time and place of the lecture. Write 40-50 words. Here is my answer: NOTE To: All staff From: Spencer , HR Management Dear Staff, I'm glad to inform you that I feel honored to invite Ming Yang, a famous doctor who has worked as a specialist for more than ten years, to give a lecture on healthcare. It is a good opportuntiy for us to learn some knowledge about daily healthcare. Please join the lecture at 4 p.m. this Friday in the conference room. Thanks for your attention. Kind Regards, Spencer
Nov 27, 2014 9:33 AM
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NOTE [1]

To: All staff
From: Spencer , HR Management

Dear Staff,

I'm glad [2] to inform you that I feel honored to have invited Ming Yang [3], a famous [4] doctor who has worked as a specialist for more than ten years, to give a lecture on healthcare. It is a good opportuntiy for us to learn gain [5] some knowledge about daily healthcare.

Please join the lecture at 4 p.m. this Friday in the conference room.

Thanks for your attention.

Kind Regards,
Spencer

 

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[1] A better word here would be 'Notice'.  (I know the task describing writing a 'note'.)  A note is something you write for yourself or for one other person.  A notice is a document which is sent to many people.

[2] A better word would be 'pleased'.  'Glad' is an uncommon word.  In fact, I cannot think of any occasion when we would say 'glad' rather than 'happy' or 'pleased'.

[3] A doctor would usually have the title 'Dr.': "I have invited Dr. Ming Yang to visit us."

[4 Someone can be famous for dubious reasons.  It would be more polite to say that he or she is a well-regarded doctor, or a highly-respected doctor, or a renowned doctor.

[5] 'Knowledge' is something a person has.  You can gain or increase knowledge by studying and learning, but you cannot study or learn knowledge itself.

 

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Great job!  There was only one real correction.  The remaining comments were merely suggestions.

November 27, 2014
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