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Things that I love Born and raised on the grassland, I love fresh air and wide open spaces, which means it's not easy for me living in Beijing...Lolll...But, thankfully it let me realized how precious all these gifts from nature are and that we never really fully appreciated and be grateful for our mother nature. Sunshine, fresh air, cool breeze, all these priceless treasures, we're lucky to have them for free. Music, i just can't be without it. Lirics, atmosphere, rhythm, any one of them can make a great music. I'd love to try to appreciate any kind of music, but i have to admit that sometimes i can't find the beauty of some music even when people call its great. --_--...but anyway, i have some breakthrough recently: if anybody getting married, i'd recommend " Il Mondo" by Jimmy Fontana. haha. No idea when did it started, but i do love sketching. Never really take any serious sketch-related courses, i guess i have to thank for my dad, who used to draw a lot of cute animals for me when i was a little kid. I never get bored of sketching and it's such a enjoyable time when i don't get disturbed. I'm sure there are millions and millions of things that i love, it just needs me to find them out. Dancing and language-learning are on the way !
Dec 15, 2014 6:57 AM
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Things that I love

Born and raised on the grassland, I love fresh air and wide open spaces, which means it's not easy for me living in Beijing...Lolll...But, thankfully it lets me realized how precious all these gifts from nature are and that we never (really)(1) fully appreciated them, and forget to be grateful forto(2) our mother nature. Sunshine, fresh air, cool breeze, all these priceless treasures, - we're lucky to have them for free. (slightly more fitting interpunctuation i.m.o.)

(1) <em>style/logic:</em> "really fully" is a bit unelegant and, I think, superfluous. How can something be more than "fully something"?

(2) you are grateful <em>for</em> a thing, but grateful <em>to</em> the person whom you owe it (like the idiomatic <em>mother nature</em> here).
Music, i is something I just can't be without it. Lyrics, atmosphere, rhythm, any one of them can make a great music / a great piece of music. I'd love to try to appreciate any kind of music, but I have to admit that sometimes I can't find the beauty of some music even when people call its great. --_--...but anyway, i havehad some breakthrough recently: if anybody is getting/is going to get married, I'd recommend " Il Mondo" by Jimmy Fontana. haha. 
(I have) no idea when did it started, but I do love sketching. I have never really taken any serious sketch-related courses, I guess I have to thank for my dad (for that), who used to draw a lot of cute animals for me when I was a little kid. I never get bored of sketching(,) and it's such an enjoyable time when I don't get disturbed. 
I'm sure there are millions and millions of things that i love, (it just needs me)(3) I just need to find them out. Dancing and language-learning are on the way !

(3) Can you say that? I'm not sure! I do not know this formulation, sorry.

Not bad I feel! Some advice: 

The word "I" is always spelled capital.

You use a lot of contractions like "we're" or "can't", which is very colloquial. The less colloquial alternatives would be "we are" and "cannot".

I share your enjoyment of drawing and how it's so very relaxing. :)

December 19, 2014
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