Second part of my writing:
My future boss called me because she saw that I won a scholarship from a bank by writing a research paper about the payment cards industry in Kazakhstan and its' future. My research work took first place and I receive a check with my scholarship. And that work allowed me to be a trainee at the Central Branch of the Bank during my third year of education at university.
I was working in the bank when I received an advertisement about a free vacancy at the main branch of the bank. I sent all copies of my documents and received a call from the HR Department which called me to come and take part in a meeting with the CEO of the bank . At that meeting the CEO asked me questions about my English level, and gave advice on how to learn it very well. After meeting with him my life was changed- I were moved to the Private Landing Department of the bank. I worked there for eight month and then made a decision that I must learn something new.
After that decision I worked in many places as a salesperson. After I left the bank I got work at another bank but soon realized that I cannot live on this salary and I lft to find better work Next place was a company where my responsibilities were selling metal pipes for the construction sector of Kazakhstan. But still the salary was low, and I had no money for learning English.
At one of the trainings for sales personal I received an offer to work as a project manager . The situation with the salary were still bad, and I decided to return to the banking industry. Now I am working as a leading expert the in the card unit of a bank here in Astana, my responsibilities are to find new clients, issue VISA payment cards, and deliver excellent customer service to our clients.
1 Well done. Just remember that the word "bank" doesn't have a capital letter in English.
2 Watch for "a" and " the". I have a new job.
3 Your tenses. The above should all be in the past tense except the last sentence. Now I am working.... present tense.