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The Holiday My holiday starts the day after tomorrow and so far I can’t think of any certain plan except spending time with my family and sleeping extra or at least as much as I want :-) I have always noticed that sleeping is more important to me than eating, I just can’t think right or do anything if I don’t sleep well. I’m not sure why I need 8 hours sleeping, but I understand that others need 6 hours sleeping and they feel it’s enough. After all, I’m sure the holiday is more than sleeping and I want to help my parents to fix our garden by removing unwanted grass and think of a new idea to decorate it, I like that very much. I wish you all happy times with your families and loved ones.
Dec 18, 2014 11:48 AM
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     The Holiday

     My holiday vacation starts the day after tomorrow; and so far I can’t think of any certain have no plans except besides spending time with my family and sleeping extra or at least as much as I want. 
I have always noticed that Sleeping is more important to me than eating. I just can’t think right or do anything right if I don’t sleep well. I’m not sure why I need 8 eight hours of sleep,ing, but I understand that others need 6 hours sleeping and they feel that just six hours are it’s enough for them.
     After all, I’m sure the holiday is for more than just sleeping. and I want to help my parents to fix improve our garden. by removing We are going to remove the unwanted grass, and then think of a new idea way to decorate it. I like that working in the garden very much.
     I wish you all happy times a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year spent with your families and loved ones. 

     <em>You are "splicing sentences" with or without punctuation. Note the addition of periods, semicolons, and commas. Preparatory phrases such as: "I have noticed," and "I'm sure" are excessive and do not add to the essay. I understand that "holiday" and "vacation" denote the same idea in Europe, but I decided to add "vacation" as a demonstration of North American usage. 
     Good Job. What is your native language?  </em>

December 20, 2014
Thanks Ruthi& it's really good to know that I'm not the only one:-)
December 20, 2014
Yes I also love sleeping 8 hours a night! I love to go to bed early to get that really good sleep. Happy Holidays!
December 18, 2014
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