Misa
12/26/2014 Snow flakes drifted from the sky and soon after the land was covered by a layer of thick white blanket. When the moonlight shaded its light and turned the landscape into a silver sheet. Houses were scattered on the landscape. Warm light emitted from the windows. Everyone was enjoying on this Christmas eve. Merries was in the air. As the night deepened, after everyone went to the bed, Santa Claus will climb into the house through the chimney and put down the presents for kids. But I have no house to live in and have no family, therefore have no chimney for the Santa Claus to enter into the house to give me the present. I looked into the night sky.
Dec 20, 2014 4:27 PM
Corrections · 3

12/26/2014 <em>(into the future again?  26th is already past Christmas!)</em>

Snow flakes started drifting down from the sky <em>(would be weird if it were NOT from the sky!)</em> and soon after the land/ground was covered by with a layer of thick white blanket.
When the moonlight shaded its rose, moonlight and turned the landscape into a silver/silvery sheet. Houses were scattered here and there/sparsely in this on the landscape. Warm light emitted/gleamed/shone from the windows. Everyone was enjoying on this Christmas eve. Merriment was in the air.
As the night deepened, deepens, after everyone went goes/has gone to the bed, Santa Claus will <em>(using both past and future tenses - they are at odds)</em> climbs into the house through via/by means of the chimney and put down the deposits/leaves presents for the children kids.
But I have no house to live in and have no family, and therefore have no chimney for the Santa Claus who has no way to enter into the house by the chimney to give me any present <em>(besides, you're no longer a kid! haha)</em>.  I looked into gazed/gaze? forlornly at the night sky.

December 25, 2014
For the last sentence, I would like to change to "Santa Claus has no way to enter into the house by the chimney to give me present." Please correct my entries, thanks a lot.
December 20, 2014
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