Misa
12/27/2014 One day, I went to school. I walked along the street with hurried paces in the crowd. Something was in my mind. Suddenly, I couldn’t find a purchase and slipped. When I recovered from my shock, I was sitting on the ground. I turned my head and saw a piece of banana skin lying on the ground. So, this is the one that made me slipped.
Dec 21, 2014 5:59 AM
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12/27/2014 <em>(a futuristic diary?)</em>

One day, when I went was on my way to school, I walking rapidly/quickly  <em>(alternatively just 'rushing') </em>along the/a crowded street with hurried paces  <em>(the order is incorrect, and better to convert the phrases to the adjective and adverb)</em> in the crowd. Something was in my mind. Suddenly, I couldn’t find a purchase lost my footing and slipped. When I recovered from my shock, I found I was sitting on the ground. I turned my head and saw a piece of banana skin lying on the ground. So, I thought to myself this is the one that is what made me slipped.

 

<em>What is going on in that complex brain of yours Mila?  What nade you write this?</em>

 

 

December 25, 2014

12/27/2014

One day, I went to school. I walked along the street with a hurried pace with in the crowd. Something was on my mind. Suddenly, I couldn’t find my footing and slipped. When I recovered from my shock, I was sitting on the ground. I turned my head and saw a piece of banana skin lying on the ground. So, this is the one that made me slip.

December 21, 2014
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