由于英语不是我的母语，所以我改得有可能不太准确，不过我希望还是能帮助你啊。

please help me correct my essay.Thank you!

As we all know,the traffic in the city is getting worse in China.The traffic problem not only can cause huge damage to the economy, but it also may lead to the paralysis of the urban function when it becomes extremely serious. And the direct damage resulting from the traffic problem is also huge. For example, it makes the traffic slowing down, what further results in a waste of time and the increase of oil consumption, as well as the environmental pollution. Furthermore, the increasement of traffical accidents should also be imputed to it. Traffical accidents, in the contrary, bring about the traffic problem. Naturally, a vicious cricle comes into being.

What we should do, to release this situation, is not to complain but to find the causes and to find some ways to solve it. As far as it concernes me, first,the process of urbanization is speeded up too crazily and blindly, but the urban infrastructure cannot follow it. In this way, the traffic problems turn up in some way. Secondly, the design of the roads is not very efficient. For example, the setting of greenbelts and traffic lights is not reasonable, which worsens the traffic jams. Thirdly, the moral culture of the citizens needs to be improved a lot. lf everyone would care about traffic regulations consciously, the releasing of traffical problems would be absolutely possible. Of course,there are many other factors leading to this serious consequence. What l have stated above are just some of them.

After having analysed the causes, it is time to talk about solutions. ln the first place,we should take great efforts to develope the urban public transport and the urban infrastructure. At the same time, designing a reasonable traffic network also should be attached (to 我不太确定这一点，请你谅解。) great importance (由于你已经写了also所以我觉得没有必要再加too=)). Last but not least, improving the quality of people should not be looked down upon. Of course, there are many other solutions. No matter what measure we take, the goal that we want to achieve in common, is (在前面你已经写了that,所以我觉得不用重复的写阿。) to make us lead a better life.
ln our world, let us make a concerted effort to build a better city.

当你说到某一个确定的对象的时，应该用"the"来指的这个对象。好像不能说：In order to solve problem of traffic, I think we should do the following: ... 而需要这样说： In order to solve the problem of traffic, I think we should do the following:．．　

无论如何，最好找一个英国人帮你改。我只学了两年的英语，所以我的英语水平也不太高。

It would be the best if there would be any native english speaker, who corrects your essay.

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