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A little story Hi! My name is Joe. I was born on 22nd november 1995. When I was grade three, I played football a lot, because that is my hobby, and because of that my right hand was broken on the game. I didn't go to school about a month, but how lucky I was. My dad bought me a nintendo, and that was super awesome! The funniest thing I have ever done when my hand was broken is I could play nintendo with broken hand, and I think that was awesome and also insane. I can say I like playing football, guitar , games , singing and talking about unimportant things such as complaining. I took semester off for a year, Because I got a job. I was working there about eight months and now i am preparing to continue my study. This year I felt lucky. I'm lucky to've met and known a girl from korea. Because she wants to practice her english on skype she asked me to give my account skype. I talked a lot with her and we have a schedule to talk every weekend. Please correct my entry
Dec 22, 2014 10:38 AM
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A little story

Hi! My name is Joe. I was born on 22nd november 1995. When I was in  grade three, I often played football a lot, because that is my hobby., As a result and because of that my right hand was broken during a on the game. I didn't go to school for about a month, but how lucky I was. My dad bought me a nintendo, and that was super awesome!
The funniest thing I have ever done did while when my hand was broken was to is I could play nintendo with a broken hand, and I think that was awesome and also insane.

I can say I like playing football, guitar, games, and I also enjoy singing and talking about unimportant things such as complaining.

I took a semester off for a year, because I got a job. I was working worked there for about eight months and now I am preparing to continue my studies.

This year I felt lucky. I'm lucky to've met and gotten to know known a girl from Korea. Because she wants to practice her English on skype she asked me to give my skype account skype.
I often talked a lot with to her and we have a schedule to talk every weekend.

Please correct my entry

December 22, 2014
thank you for you suggestion kyle.
December 23, 2014
Unfortunately, "to've" is not a valid contraction. However, I really wish that it was! I didn't find many mistakes in your writing. I would, however, recommend that you watch your run-on sentences. You don't want to let your sentences get too overwhelming and wordy. Also, there's no need to capitalize your conjunctions. (Example: but, or, and, etc.)
December 22, 2014
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