HaLee
Can you help me correct this notebook entry? 1> A old year is ended, a new one is begun. I hope that 2015 will bring happiness, blessing and prosperity for you all and people in the world will have better life .They won't suffer from war , Ebola, aviation accidents such as MH370 , MH17, SQ501 .... The world has witnessed thousands people who dying of disease . It is the biggest sadness of the world . I hope that the earth will become better with out war ,terrorist attacks,disease .... 2> 80% of boys like girls with long hair, straight. Lumbar hair, straight and silky black has become "brands", whether through many "events" ups and downs, intense competition with the most sophisticated hairstyles, long hair, it still has its own place and never be out of fashion. A jet-black hair, not too long, the roof was lifted after two neck or tied up neatly always attractive magic, that son "love" from the first minute. 3> Many things in the life can be right or wrong depend on the feeling of their own way . Sometimes when they think it is right ,they will support, and when they think it is wrong , they will criticize. So, you need to do anything that you don't feel shame with your heart. 4> Nowday , people suffer from tons burden of life . It lead some health problems such as stress.So , in the free time , they usually read book , listen to music , play the games . watch TV...to relax after the hard working day . For me, I choose reading book because it broadens my knowledge of nature and human civilizations.Every day , before I go to bed , I always read book . It is easy for me to fall asleep. 5> Hi, all you. I am Hai Bang , my nickname is Anna Lee. I am from Vietnam. I've just taken part in Italki's community since 6 days ago. I am glad of being a member of Italki. In fact, Italki is the best site I 've known.As you know , I can learn many different languages , cultures and meet many friends in the world . 6> My love You are the angel without wings , comes to my life You are the air , always by my side You are the sun, leads the path for me You are the moon, shines my darkness You are the star which I see but touch
Jan 26, 2015 11:47 AM
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1> An old year has ended, a new one has begun. I hope that 2015 will bring happiness, blessing and prosperity for you all and that everyone in the world will have better life. I hope they won't suffer from war, Ebola, aviation accidents such as MH370, MH17, SQ501 .... The world has witnessed thousands people who dying of disease; it is the biggest sadness of the world. I hope that the earth will become better, without war, terrorist attacks, disease ....
2> 80% of boys like girls with long straight hair, straight. Lumbar hair, straight and silky black have become "brands", and despite many "events", ups and downs, intense competition with the most sophisticated hairstyles, long hair, it still has its own place and never goes out of fashion. Jet-black hair, not too long, <em>the roof was lifted after two neck</em> [not shure what this means] or tied up neatly always attractive magic, that boys "love" from the first minute.
3> Many things in the life can be right or wrong depending on how they feeling of their own way . Sometimes when they think it is right ,they will support, and when they think it is wrong , they will criticize. So, you need to do everything without feeling shame in your heart.
4>
Nowdays , people suffer from the heavy burden of life . It leads to some health problems such as stress. So, in their free time they usually read books, listen to music, play the games or watch TV to relax after a hard working day. For me, I choose reading books, because it broadens my knowledge of nature and human civilizations. Every day, before I go to bed I always read book. It is easy for me to fall asleep.
5> Hi, everyone. I am Hai Bang , my nickname is Anna Lee. I am from Vietnam. I've been part of Italki's community for 6 days now. I am glad to be a member of Italki. In fact, Italki is the best site I've known. As you know, I can learn many different languages, cultures and meet many friends in the world.
6> My love
You are the angel without wings , comes to my life
You are the air , always by my side
You are the sun, leads the path for me
You are the moon, shines my darkness
You are the star which I see but touch

January 26, 2015
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