A Caring from A brother I was standing on the balcony and my mind was wondering. My brother came to me and said, “I had heard that you were seeing someone, how was he?” “We have not met many times. I

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A Caring from A brother I was standing on the balcony and my mind was wondering. My brother came to me and said, “I had heard that you were seeing someone, how was he?” “We have not met many times. I feel he is weird” I replied. “You say ‘Weird’? The first person coming to my mind is our weird uncle. Just look how misery his life is. He makes two people live in misery” he told me. “One of my best friends just got married and they were both not happy. Do not rush in things” he continued. My brother got married at a very young age. He always regrets it and tells us do not get married that young like him.

Jan 27, 2015 12:48 AM

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A Caring from A brother

I was standing on the balcony and my mind was wondering wandering. My brother came to me and said, “I had heard that you were seeing someone. how was he What is he like?" (right here it might be better to say "What is he like?" rather than "How was he?" because if you ask "How was he?" it sounds like you are asking about how he was feeling or his emotional state the last time you saw him.)

“We have not met many times. I feel he is weird,” I replied.

“You say he is ‘weird’? The first person coming to my mind is our weird uncle. Just look at how misery miserable his life is. He makes two people live in misery,” he told me. “One of my best friends just got married and they were(do you mean "are" Present Tense or "were" Past Tense) both not happy unhappy. Do not rush in things,” he continued.
My brother got married at a very young age. He always regrets it and tells us do not get married that young like him. as young as him.

Remember, when writing diaologue always separate who is speaking by using this method.

Speaker 1

Speaker 2

Speaker 1

Speaker 2

It makes it less confusing for the reader :)

ALSO, when wring dialogue, be sure to add a comma before using phrases like 'he said' 'I said', etc. For example,

"I want to go to the store," Mom sad.

"I feel he is weird," I said.

Hope this helped! If you have any questions, feel free to ask!

January 27, 2015

A Caring Advice from a brother

I was standing on the balcony and my mind was wandering. My brother came to me and said, “I had heard that you were seeing someone...what is he like?” “We have not met many times. I feel he is weird” I replied. “You say ‘weird’? The first person who to my mind is our weird uncle. Just look how miserable his life is. He makes two people live in misery” he told me. “One of my best friends just got married and they were both not happy. Do not rush into things” he continued.
My brother got married at a very young age. He always regrets it and tells us do not get married that young like him.

January 27, 2015

as a german born chinese i encounter the cultural differences between china and the western world quite often. i find the chinese view of love and relationship very "traditional" to be honest. in my opinion there are still some areas in the culture where the chinese view seems to be not open minded enough. of course it is not as drastic like in india with the forced marriages but i feel like chinese people are taking love and its commitment way too seriously, e.g. pressuring each other into a serious relationship after even one date. they dont feel brave enough to say "no, i dont want this relationship" i could be wrong, of course. maybe the people in the bigger cities changed their attitude or i just got the wrong impression. however...in the west, where i grew up, we are more open minded and use the "trial and error" principle. the purpose of a date is to get to know each other and make a decision towards the relationship. does it work out or not? if it doesnt, then both move along and start from the beginning. this is just my opinion... :)

January 28, 2015

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