Sieze the day
When I saw the sunset, I kew another day had gone. And I began to look back at it thiking what I missed and regreted . Did I do something meaningless? Or I just let time go without retrieving.I understand that not every moment in my life will be colorful,but I don't make it dim and I wiil try to draw a rainbow in my own picture.Because life cannot repeat and tomorrow is another day.
Corrections (By Chaise W.):
kew - knew, thiking - thinking, regreted - regretted, wiil - will
Things to take under consideration:
Oppose to using "another day had gone", you might want to use "another day has gone by." What did you mean by "let time go without retrieving"?
Would you like to rephrase the sentence that contains "draw a rainbow in my own picture"?
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Sieze the day
When I saw the sunset, I knew another day had gone. I began to look back at it, thinking what I missed and regretted. Did I do anything meaningful? Or did I just let time go without realizing? I understand that not every moment in my life will be colorful, but I don't want to waste it. I will try to draw a rainbow in my own picture. Because life cannot be repeated, and tomorrow is another dayl
Seize the day <em>(I know, English spelling is so inconsistent!) </em>- carpe diem!
When I saw the sunset, I knew another day had gone. <em>And</em> I began to look back at it thinking what I had missed and what I regretted <em>(one is passed perfect 'had missed', whereas regretted is simple past)</em>. Did I do/Had I done something meaningless? <em>Or</em> <em>(conjunction again!)</em> had<em> </em>I just let time go by without retrieving(?) grasping it. I understand that not every moment in my life will be colorful, but I don't make it dim won't let it be dull and I wiil try to draw a rainbow in my own picture, because <em>(another conjunction, should be the same sentence - see 'And', 'Or' above)</em> life cannot repeat itself and tomorrow is another day.
