The trip of 18 degrees north latitude After my trip,I 've been thinking about where the beginning of the story or how to introduce my trip, finally I decided to tell about a story of tow rocks -Tianya

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The trip of 18 degrees north latitude After my trip,I 've been thinking about where the beginning of the story or how to introduce my trip, finally I decided to tell about a story of tow rocks -Tianya Haijiao. I visited the first beauty spot is called Tianya Haijiao this Monday, it is located the end of south of Hainan island of China,it has the charming scenery and pleasant climate,it's famous for tow rocks ,the huge rocks with engraved with the Chinese calligraphy that standing on the beach thousands of years. The Hainan island were used to exiled officer when ancient times, because it is a lonely place and far away from the mainland, the ancients thought that to live on island with aboriginal people with a barbaric way that it must be very horrible,so it was imagined a hell,many political scholars and litterateurs who opposed with their government were sent to here,but they found it is an abundant and a beautiful place when they set foot in the land. Reputedly Su Dongpo (an important figure in Song Dynasty )was also as one of a person who was banished ,one day he walked on the beach when after drinking,and then he borrow wine lyric to write Tianya letters with Chinese calligraphy on the huge rock,it is meaning of the ends of the earth.The other according to tale that the Haijiao letters was engraved by artisan when he saw the Tianya letters after,so we usurally called this place is Tianya Haijiao. If you arrived here it means you have arrived the end of world ,due to the special meaning that I will follow you to the uttermost parts of the earth,so Tianya Haijiao is a heaven for people who fell in love, but it is not good meaning for other tourists for another meaning that at the end of one's tether,so most of tourists just only go to see the Tianya when they come here to visit the rock,because there are four letters ' Hai Kuo Tian Kong (海阔天空)' below the Tianya,it means life begins on the other side of despair.

Jan 30, 2015 10:53 AM

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The trip to 18 degrees north latitude

After my trip, I 've been thinking how to begin the story, or how to introduce my trip. Finally I decided to tell a story of [? tow ?] two rocks - Tianya Haijiao.

I visited the scenic spot called Tianya Haijiao this Monday. It is located at the southern end of Hainan island of China. It has charming scenery and pleasant climate. The place is famous for [? tow ?] two rocks, huge rocks engraved with Chinese calligraphy that have been standing on the beach for thousands of years.

Hainan island was used to exile government officers since ancient times, because it is an isolated place far away from the mainland. The ancients thought that to live on an island populated by aboriginal people with a barbaric way of life would be horrible, and the place was compared to hell. Many politicians, scholars, and authors who opposed their government were sent here, but they found it an abundant and beautiful place once when they set foot in the land.

Reputedly Su Dongpo (an important figure in Song Dynasty) was also one of the people who were banished here. One day he walked on the beach after drinking, and then he [? borrow wine lyric?] took a word from a drinking poem, writing the characters "Tianya" with Chinese calligraphy on the huge rock. The word means "the ends of the earth". According to another tale, that the characters Haijiao were engraved by an artisan [? when he saw the Tianya letters after ? -- not clear: did the artisan saw the letters somewhere else and then engraved them on the rock? Did he see them painted on the rock by Su Dongpo and then incised them permanently?], so we usually call this place Tianya Haijiao.

If you arrive here it means you have reached the end of world. Because the word "Tianya" has the connotation "I will follow you to the uttermost ends of the earth", Tianya Haijiao became a destination for people who fall in love. Otherwise, the word has a not-so-pleasant connotation of "being at the end of one's tether". [? Most of tourists just only go to see the Tianya when they come here to visit the rock, ? -- not quite clear what you wanted to say; of course if they come to see the Tianya rock, they see the rock...] There are four characters "Hai Kuo Tian Kong (海阔天空)" below the word "Tianya"; they mean "life begins on the other side of despair".

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[ Overall, a fairly good piece of writing; I think I could understand 95%+ of it. My corrections are mostly for style, not grammar. For example, it helps to break the text into shorter sentences]

February 1, 2015

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