CHIRSTMAS TRIP TO BERLIN WE HIRED A GUIDE TO DO A FREE TOUR FOR THE MOST TYPICAL MONUMENTS IN BERLIN. WE MET HER NEAR BRANDERBOUR GATE AT 11.00 AM. FIRSTLY SHE EXPLAINED A LITLLE INTRODUCCION ABOUT HI

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CHIRSTMAS TRIP TO BERLIN WE HIRED A GUIDE TO DO A FREE TOUR FOR THE MOST TYPICAL MONUMENTS IN BERLIN. WE MET HER NEAR BRANDERBOUR GATE AT 11.00 AM. FIRSTLY SHE EXPLAINED A LITLLE INTRODUCCION ABOUT HISTORY OF BERLIN, AFTER THAT WE WENT A VERY BIG SQUARE, IT IS A MONUMENT IN REPRESENTATION ALL OF GERMAN VICTIMS OF THE SECOND WORLD WAR, THERE ARE ABOUT 1611 BLOCKS, AND ALL ARE DIFFERENTS. NEAR THERE, IT WAS THE BUNKER WHERE ADOLF HITLER FINISHED WITH HIS OWN LIFE. THE BUNKER WAS DEMOLEITED BECAUSE THE GERMAN GOUVERMENT DIDN´T WANT BUILD ANY DUE TO THEY DON´T WANT TO HAVE ANY BUILT IN RELATION WITH TO FASCISM. NEXT POINT TO VISIT WAS “THE WALL OF BERLIN”, THE WALL OF BERLIN DIVIDED THE CITY IN TWO PARTS, HALF COMUNIST MANAGED BY RUSSIAN AND THE OTHER ONE MANEGED BY A PARTNERSHIP AMERICAN, FRENCH AND ENGLISH. THE WALL OF BERLIN WAS BUILT BECAUSE A LOT COMUNISM CROSSED THE HALL TOWARDS ALLIANZ BECAUSE THEY HAD MORE OPPORTUNITIES TO IMPROVE THEIR LIFES. FINALLY, IN 1989 THE WALL WAS DESTROYED AND GERMANY WAS UNIFIQUED. ALSO WE VISITED POINT ECHO-CHARLIE, IT WAS A POINT IN THE WALL, IT SERVED TO CROSS THE WALL BOTH DIRECCTION. AT THE END, WE FINISHED OUR VISIT IN THE BERLIN UNIVERTITY WHERE ALL OF THEIR STUDENTS HAVE OBTEINED NOBEL PRIZES SUCH AS ALFRED EINSTEIN, OTTO BEINTEN... IT SNOWED A LOT SO WE WENT TO DRINK A HOT WINE AND EAT SOME SAUSAGE. AFTER, WE MET WITH BARBARA IN HER SHOOP, SHE WORKS LIKE SHOP ASISSTANCE IN A COMERCIAL CENTER, IT IS A CLOTHES´SHOP. WE PICK UP HER, AND WE WENT TO SEARCH A TIPICAL DISH OF GERMANY CALLED “CODILLO”, BUT WE DIDN.T FIND ANY RESTAURANT WHERE IT WAS COOKED AND FINALLY WE HAD DINNER SUSHI IN A JAPANESE RESTAURANT. LAST DAY OF THE YEAR0 GOT UP EARLY, WE HAD BREAKFAST IN A VERY FAMOUS BAKERY, AND WE WENT TO VISIT A MUSEUM WHERE TREY SHOW HOW PEOPLE LIVED IN THE COMUNISM AREA, HOW WAS LIFESTYLE, THEIR HOUSES…AS WELL WE VISITED A BUNKER INSIDE THE SUBWAY THAT PERMITTED TO HIDE POPULATION DURING THE BLITZ IN THE SECOND WORLD WAR. FINALLY WE BOUGHT SOME FOOD IN THE SUPERMARKET TO CELEBRATE LAST DAY OF THE YEAR IN BARBARA´S HOUSE. BEFORE START TO DINNER WE SLEPT FOR 2HOURS TO REST A LITLLE BIT BECAUSE WE WERE TIRED, AND WE NEEDED TO REST ANY BECAUSE NIGHT IT WOULD BE VERY LONG. WE STARTED TO DINNER AT 9 O´CLOCK, MANY KINDS OF CHEESE, SALAD, OLIVES, RED WINE, WHITE WINE, CHAMPAGNE, FISH… AND WE CELEBRATE LAST TWELVE SECONS OF THE YEAR EATING TWELTE GRAPES,

Jan 31, 2015 8:59 PM

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CHIRSTMAS TRIP TO BERLIN

WE HIRED A GUIDE TO DO A FREE TOUR FOR THE MOST TYPICAL MONUMENTS IN BERLIN. WE MET HER NEAR BRANDERBOUR GATE AT 11.00 AM. FIRSTLY, SHE EXPLAINED A LITLLE INTRODUCCION introduction ABOUT HISTORY OF BERLIN, AFTER THAT WE WENT A VERY BIG SQUARE, IT IS A MONUMENT IN REPRESENTATION ALL OF GERMAN VICTIMS OF THE SECOND WORLD WAR, THERE ARE ABOUT 1611 BLOCKS, AND ALL ARE DIFFERENTS different. NEAR THERE, IT WAS THE BUNKER WHERE ADOLF HITLER FINISHED WITH HIS OWN LIFE. THE BUNKER WAS DEMOLEITED demolished BECAUSE THE GERMAN GOUVERMENT government DIDN´T WANT BUILD ANYthing DUE TO THEY DON´T WANT TO HAVE ANY BUILT IN RELATION WITH TO FASCISM.
NEXT POINT place TO VISIT WAS “THE WALL OF BERLIN”, THE WALL OF BERLIN DIVIDED THE CITY IN TWO PARTS, HALF COMUNIST communist MANAGED BY RUSSIANs AND THE OTHER ONE was MANEGED BY A PARTNERSHIP (between) AMERICA FRENCH (France) AND ENGLISH (England). THE WALL OF BERLIN WAS BUILT BECAUSE A LOT COMUNISM communism CROSSED THE HALL TOWARDS ALLIANZ alliance ,BECAUSE THEY HAD MORE OPPORTUNITIES TO IMPROVE THEIR LIFES lives. FINALLY, IN 1989 THE WALL WAS DESTROYED AND GERMANY WAS UNIFIQUED. ALSO WE VISITED POINT ECHO-CHARLIE, IT WAS A POINT IN THE WALL, IT SERVED TO CROSS THE WALL BOTH DIRECCTION. AT THE END, WE FINISHED OUR VISIT IN THE BERLIN UNIVERTITY WHERE ALL OF THEIR STUDENTS HAVE OBTEINED obtained NOBEL PRIZES SUCH AS ALFRED EINSTEIN, OTTO BEINTEN...
IT SNOWED A LOT SO WE WENT TO DRINK A HOT WINE AND EAT SOME SAUSAGE. AFTER, WE MET WITH BARBARA IN HER SHOOP shop, SHE WORKS LIKE SHOP ASISSTANCE IN A COMERCIAL CENTER, IT IS A CLOTHES´SHOP.
WE PICK UP HER, AND WE WENT TO SEARCH A TIPICAL typical DISH OF GERMANY CALLED “CODILLO”, BUT WE DIDN.T didn't FIND ANY RESTAURANT WHERE IT WAS COOKED, AND FINALLY WE HAD DINNER SUSHI IN A JAPANESE RESTAURANT. LAST DAY OF THE YEAR0 GOT UP EARLY, WE HAD BREAKFAST IN A VERY FAMOUS BAKERY, AND WE WENT TO VISIT A MUSEUM WHERE TREY SHOW HOW PEOPLE LIVED IN THE COMUNISM AREA, HOW WAS LIFESTYLE, THEIR HOUSES…AS WELL WE VISITED A BUNKER INSIDE THE SUBWAY THAT PERMITTED TO HIDE POPULATION DURING THE BLITZ IN THE SECOND WORLD WAR. FINALLY WE BOUGHT SOME FOOD IN THE SUPERMARKET TO CELEBRATE LAST DAY OF THE YEAR IN BARBARA´S HOUSE. BEFORE START TO DINNER WE SLEPT FOR 2HOURS TO REST A LITLLE BIT BECAUSE WE WERE TIRED, AND WE NEEDED TO REST ANY BECAUSE NIGHT IT WOULD BE VERY LONG. WE STARTED TO DINNER AT 9 O´CLOCK, MANY KINDS OF CHEESE, SALAD, OLIVES, RED WINE, WHITE WINE, CHAMPAGNE, FISH… AND WE CELEBRATE LAST TWELVE SECONS OF THE YEAR EATING TWELTE GRAPES,

Just a side note:

Try using capital letters in the appropriate situations. The entire paragraph does not need to be in capital letters just the names of people and places, as well as when starting a new sentence.

For the most part I corrected some of your spelling errors, however there are quite a few things that need to be rephrased.

Be mindful of your punctuation marks and grammar , as well as the placement of commas.

Happy learning!

Chaise W., Community Tutor

January 31, 2015

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