·Ruth Han
A horrible day I planned to go to downtown with my friend this morning.However It was rainy and chilly cold which inhibited us to go outside together.I really hates cold day!At this moment I can still hear the sound of heavy rain and strong wind.The tragic was that I was informed of participating driving test tomorrow morning and had to arrive at the place before 7:40.There's no doubt that It's a big challenge for me to get out of bed so early in such cold weather.Nevertheless,I will do my utmost to get up on time,I promise. My cousin will get married in two days, and everyone should be happy.However my cousin's finance had an argumeIsnt with him and my aunt ,uncle tonight just because they had a disagreement on the customs of marriage.I think the root of their distractions is money.The traditional Chinese value opinions tracing back thouand of years still exists in rural area s in China.It looks like even if I love you,I love money more.You give me enough money ,and I can marry you.My views maybe not absolutely correct but such phenomenon doesn't fade away in our surroundings.I'm wondering, does It have pure marriage just for love in the world?I guess this is most people want to have including me. I type too much words tonight.Well,time to sleep,good luck for the test.
Feb 27, 2015 3:23 PM
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I planned to go to downtown with my friend this morning. However It was RAINING and chilly which inhibited us FROM GOING outside together. I really hate cold DAYS! At THE moment I can still hear the sound of heavy rain and strong wind. The TRADEGY was that I was informed of MY PARTICIPATION IN A driving test tomorrow morning and HAVE to arrive before 7:40. There's no doubt that it’s a big challenge for me to get out of bed so early in such cold weather. Nevertheless, I will do my utmost to get up on time, I promise.
My cousin will get married in two days, and everyone should be happy. However my cousin's finance had an argument with him and my aunt AND uncle tonight, just because they had a disagreement OVER the customs of marriage. I think the root of their distraction is money. The traditional Chinese VIEW, tracing back THOUSANDS of years still exists in rural areas OF China. It looks like even if I love you, I love money more. You give me enough money and I can marry you. My views may not BE absolutely correct but such phenomenon doesn't fade away in our WORLD. I'm wondering, does pure marriage just for love EXIST IN THIS world? I guess this is WHAT most people want to have, including me.
I TYPED too MANY words tonight. Well, time to sleep, WISH ME LUCK FOR MY DRIVING TEST.

NOTES:
CAPITALS = CORRECTION
- “chilly cold” = “really cold”, or you can just pick one, “chilly” = implies “cold”
- “In this moment”, Is not commonly used, I have only heard it on British films or TV shows. It is better to say “right now” or “at the moment”
- “….Of their distraction is money” = Did you mean “disagreement”?
- “good luck for the test” – Is something you would say to someone else, or if writing in a diary. But because this is a public forum and because you have told us about your driving test you can say “wish me luck”.
Any Questions? Feel free to ask.

February 28, 2015
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