A good role model. There aren’t guidelines to become successful in life but people usually try to look at famous people to make it. Unfortunately, they aren’t always the best role model. When you

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A good role model. There aren’t guidelines to become successful in life but people usually try to look at famous people to make it. Unfortunately, they aren’t always the best role model. When you are a child, you probably copycat someone you really admire. Sporting heroes, such as Usain Bolt, Michael Jordan or Steffi Graf, usually are the models which children try to imitate. For this reason, famous people should cope with fame and money and avoid wrong behaviors. To achieve this, education and respect have to be the basis of our society. However, there are some sporting people which are known for their individualist behavior on their teams. That is a wrong role model for children because teamwork is one of the most important skills. Everybody has to deal with people in the different stages of their real life. Summing up, nowadays famous privacy is even less than before due to the technology and social networks. So that's why they should try to be good role models on both their sporting and personal life.

Mar 2, 2015 4:24 PM

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A good role model.

There aren’t any guidelines to become successful in life but people usually try to look at famous people to make it. Unfortunately, they aren’t always the best role models.

When you are a child, you probably copycat someone you really admire. Sporting heroes, such as Usain Bolt, Michael Jordan or Steffi Graf, usually are the models which children try to imitate. For this reason, famous people should learn to cope with fame and money and avoid wrong bad behaviors. To achieve this, education and respect have to be the basis of our society.

However, there are some sporting people which who are known for their individualist behavior on their teams. That is a wrong poor role model for children because teamwork is one of the most important skills. Everybody has to deal with people in the different stages of their real life.

Summing up, nowadays famous people's privacy is even less than before due to the technology and social networks. So that's why they should try to be good role models on in both their sporting and personal life.

Very good Juan. My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.

March 3, 2015

A good role model.

There aren’t guidelines to become successful in life but people usually try to look at look up to famous people in order to become successful. Unfortunately, they aren’t always the best role models.

When you were a child, you probably mimiced (sounds better) someone that you really admired. Sporting heroes Famous athletes, such as Usain Bolt, Michael Jordan or Steffi Graf, usually are the models which children try to imitate. For this reason, famous people should cope with fame and money and avoid wrong behaviors. To achieve this, education and respect have to be the basis of our society.

However, there are some sporting people athletes who are known for their individualist behavior on their teams. That is a wrong bad role model for children because teamwork is one of the most important skills. Everybody has to deal with people in the different stages of their real life.

Summing up, nowadays famous people have even less privacy than they did before due to the technology and social networks. So that's why they should try to be good role models in both their sporting and personal life.