Jack
Anting old town Tangyuan Do you know Chinese Tangyuan? It's a kind of delicious food in China. And it is also called rice balls or dumpling balls. There are many tastes of Tangyuan, such as bean paste, black sesame, peanut and salt, and so on. I almost only accept black sesame. Today is Saturday, rainy. I still have to work. I'm a SAP consultant. I keptp working until half past eight p.m. I'm hardworking and crazy to work. After work, I ride back home. On my way back home, there is a good-look shop named Anting old town Tangyuan, which has various kinds of dumpling. Then I ate a bowl of small wonton with pork. It's warm and tasty. I like this this deep night food, and I like this good shop.
Mar 3, 2015 1:06 PM
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Anting old town Tangyuan

Do you know Chinese Tangyuan? It's a kind of delicious food in China Chinese delicacy, . And it is also called known as rice balls or dumpling balls. There are many tastes flavors of Tangyuan, such as bean paste, black sesame, peanut and salt, and so on. I almost only accept prefer black sesame.
Today is On rainy Saturdays, rainy. I still when I have to work, . I'm a SAP consultant. I keptp working until half past eight p.m. I'm hardworking and crazy to work. After work, I ride back home.
On my way back home, I like visiting my favorite there is a good-look shop named Anting old town Tangyuan, after I leave work. This shop which has various kinds of dumplings. Then I ate A bowl of small wonton with pork is It's warm and tasty. I like this this deep comforting night food on a cold winter night, and I like this good shop. The taste of this delicious food makes working on a weekend well, worth it.


Jack:

This story is about your past experience eating this delicious food. Therefore, you should not switch from past tense (过去式) to present tense (现在时)。 This is why I removed the parts about the kind of job you have now. Your job is not important to the story but the fact that you work on a Saturday is important.

March 3, 2015
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