Aleksander Enoksen
我的作业。 4. Writing exercise: 写一个你听说过的传说故事。 Write out a legend that you have heard before. 北欧神话的为什么地震起来的话。 有的时候有一位叫的神。他有个也看一个非常恐怕的梦,看自己的死。他说为他母亲说这个梦,她也很恐怕了。她接世界的都的人,动物和东西,让他们承诺他们不伤巴德爾。可是他忘了槲寄生,所以槲寄生是能杀巴德爾唯一的东西。洛基是这个神的世界的混乱的神,因为他不喜欢别人的设计,他老是想破了这个。他听说槲寄生还能杀巴德爾他很高兴了,想做这个杀他。因为神都觉得巴德爾不能死,他们每天用弓箭射他,洛基把槲寄生附箭射巴德爾,所以巴德爾死了。别的把洛基神很生气,他们为了处罚他把链条包裹他,而且往一个很小山洞投入他。在那里洛基差不多动不到,可是他有的时候动的话,地球都震,这是地震的原意。 因为我的中文不好,我也写这个话的英语的文本。你不懂我写的中文的话,请阅读英语的。 Once upon a time there was a god named Balder. One night he had a frightening dream, he saw his own death. When he told his mom of this dream, she was also scared. She met all the people, animals, and things in the world, and made them promise that they wouldn’t hurt Balder. But she forgot the mistletoe, thus the mistletoe became the only thing in the world that could kill Balder. Loke was the god of chaos in this world of gods, because he didn’t like other people’s plans, he always wanted to ruin them. When he heard that the mistletoe could still kill Balder he became very happy, and he thought he would use it to kill him. Because the gods thought that Balder couldn’t die, they shot him every day with a bow and arrow. Loke tied the mistletoe to an arrow, and shot Balder, and then Balder died. The other gods were very angry at Loke, to punish him they used chains to tie him up, and then they threw him into a cave. Loke almost couldn’t move there, but when he moved, the earth shook, that is the reason that we have earthquakes.
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我的作业。

4. Writing exercise:
写一个你听说过的传说故事。
Write out a legend that you have heard before.

北欧神话的为什么地震起来的话。 

从前有一位叫Balder的神。有一天晚上他做了一个噩梦梦见自己死了他把这个梦告诉了他的妈妈,她也很害怕了。她去见了世界所有的人,动物和万物,让他们承诺他们不伤巴德爾。可是他忘了槲寄生,所以槲寄生是世界上唯一能杀巴德爾的东西。洛基是这个世界的掌管混乱的神,因为他不喜欢别人的计划,他老是想毁坏它们。他听说槲寄生还能杀巴德爾他很高兴,想可以利用这一点杀他。因为神都觉得巴德爾不死,他们每天用弓箭射他,洛基把槲寄生附射巴德爾,所以巴德爾死了。别的神对loke很生气,他们为了处罚他把链条捆绑起来之后把他扔到了一个小洞里。在那里洛基几乎不能动如果他动一下,地球就会震,这是地震的原

you cannot translate English word into Chinese charaters one by one. 
 
因为我的中文不好,我也写这个话的英语的文本。你不懂我写的中文的话,请阅读英语的。

Once upon a time there was a god named Balder. One night he had a frightening dream, he saw his own death. When he told his mom of this dream, she was also scared. She met all the people, animals, and things in the world, and made them promise that they wouldn’t hurt Balder. But she forgot the mistletoe, thus the mistletoe became the only thing in the world that could kill Balder. Loke was the god of chaos in this world of gods, because he didn’t like other people’s plans, he always wanted to ruin them. When he heard that the mistletoe could still kill Balder he became very happy, and he thought he would use it to kill him. Because the gods thought that Balder couldn’t die, they shot him every day with a bow and arrow. Loke tied the mistletoe to an arrow, and shot Balder, and then Balder died. The other gods were very angry at Loke, to punish him they used chains to tie him up, and then they threw him into a cave. Loke almost couldn’t move there, but when he moved, the earth shook, that is the reason that we have earthquakes.

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4. Writing exercise:  

Write out a legend that you have heard before.

請寫出一個你曾經聽過的傳說

關於地震由來的北歐神話

很久很久以前,有一個神叫做巴德爾。

Once upon a time there was a god named Balder.

有天晚上巴德爾做了一个非常恐的梦,夢見了自己的死

One night he had a frightening dream, he saw his own death.

巴德爾將他所做的夢告訴了母亲,他的母親嚇壞了。

When he told his mom of this dream, she was also scared.

巴德爾的母親去見了世界上所有的人动物以及东西,並要求他们承诺她不巴德爾。

She met all the people, animals, and things in the world, and made them promise that they wouldn’t hurt Balder.

但是了槲寄生存在於是槲寄生便成為了世上唯一能杀巴德爾东西。

But she forgot the mistletoe(existing), thus the mistletoe became the only thing in the world that could kill Balder.

在神話世界裡混亂之神(the god of chaos)洛基不喜欢别人的計劃而且是想了它們

Loke was the god of chaos in this world of gods, because he didn’t like other people’s plans, he always wanted to ruin them.

洛基听说槲寄生依然巴德爾,他感到十分高兴並打算用槲寄生來杀巴德爾。

When he heard that the mistletoe could still kill Balder he became very happy, and he thought he would use it to kill him. 

其他的神都觉得巴德爾不死,於是他们每天用弓箭射巴德爾

Because the gods thought that Balder couldn’t die, they shot him every day with a bow and arrow.

→really?why?are they doing it just for fun?

洛基把槲寄生綁在上拿來射巴德爾,巴德爾死了,其他的神對此感到非常生氣

Loke tied the mistletoe to an arrow, and shot Balder, and then Balder died.The other gods were very angry at Loke.

为了处罚洛基,他們洛基用鍊子綁起來並且將他丟入山洞中

To punish him they used chains to tie him up, and then they threw him into a cave.

洛基在那裏幾乎動彈不得动的時候整個地球都會跟著他,这是地震的由來。 

Loke almost couldn’t move there, but when he moved, the earth shook, that is the reason that we have earthquakes.


this is too difficult for you.

you should try to start with something simpler.^_^

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我的作业。

4. Writing exercise:
写一个你听说过的传说故事。 (神话故事)
Write out a legend that you have heard before.

北欧神话的为什么地震起来的话。 (北欧神话:为什么大地震动起来?)

有的时候有一位叫神。(很久以前有一位叫Balder的地神。)他有个也看一个非常恐怕的梦(有一天晚上,他做了一个非常可怕的梦,)在梦中他看自己。他为他母亲讲了这个梦,她也很恐怕了。她接世界的都的人她找到所有的人),动物和东西,让他们承诺他们不伤巴德爾。可是她(balder的妈妈,所以用“她)忘了告诉槲寄生,所以因此槲寄生成为了能杀巴德爾唯一东西。洛基是这个神的世界的混乱神,因为他不喜欢别人的设计,他老是想毁灭了这个。他听说槲寄生还能杀巴德爾他很高兴,想做这个利用槲寄生杀掉Balder。因为其他众神都觉得巴德爾不能死,他们(这里是其他的众神吗?)每天用弓箭射他(这里,”他“指Balder吗?),洛基把槲寄生附箭("拧成箭"或者”做成箭")射巴德爾,所以巴德爾死了。别的神(或其他神)很生洛基神的气很生气,他们为了处罚他链条包裹他,而且把他往一个很小山洞投入他了进去 。在那里洛基差不多动都不能动不到,可是他有的时候动的话,地球一起动起来了,这是地震的原意。

因为我的中文不好,我也写这个故事的英语的文本版本。你不懂我写的中文的话,请阅读英语的。

 

上面是我帮你在原文上改的,语句读起来不是很流畅,所以我在下文重新调整了一下,但我保持在你原作的基础上做最小的改动,希望你喜欢。 我也很喜欢看或听神话故事,上几天我看了一部BBC拍摄的 《clash of the gods》,很好看的希腊神话,可惜网络上只有两集,我也很喜欢你写的这篇北欧神话故事。

 

很久以前有一位叫Balder的神,有一天晚上,他做了一个非常可怕的梦,他梦见自己死了。他就告诉了母亲,她母亲也很害怕。于是,他母亲就找到所有的人、动物和其他东西,让他们承诺他们不伤害Balder。可是她忘了告诉Mistletoe,因此槲寄生成为了能杀巴德爾的唯一的东西。Loke是混乱之神,因为他不喜欢别人的设计,所以他总想着如何毁灭。他听说Mistletoe还能杀Balder,他很高兴,就想利用槲寄生杀掉Balder。因为其他众神都觉得巴德爾不能死,他们就每天用弓箭射他(这里的“他”是Balder还是“Loke?),洛基把槲寄生拧成利箭并用来射击巴德爾,所以巴德爾死了。别的神很生洛基神的气,他们为了处罚Loke就用链条把他捆绑起来,并且把他往一个很小的山洞里一扔 。在那里洛基差几乎动都不能动,可是他只要一动,地球就跟着震动起来,这就是最初的地震。

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从前有一个神叫巴尔德尔。一天夜里,他做了一个噩梦。在梦里,他梦见自己死了。当他把这个梦告诉他妈妈,她妈妈也感到非常害怕。之后,她见了这世界上所有的人、动植物和事物,并让他们许下承诺,不能伤害她的儿子巴尔德尔。但是,她却忘记警告槲寄生,这世上唯一能杀死巴尔德尔的事物。洛基是神界中混沌之神,因为他不喜欢其余人的想法,所以他总是想摧毁他们。当他听到槲寄生能够杀死巴尔德尔,他十分的开心,他想他可以利用槲寄生杀死巴尔德尔。因为众神们认为巴尔德尔是不死之身,所以他们每天都用弓箭攻击他。洛基在箭上系着槲寄生射向巴尔德尔,然后巴尔德尔死了。其他神对洛基非常生气并要惩罚他。他们用铁链拴住他,然后把他丢进了洞穴。洛基在洞里几乎不能动,但是当他动的时候,地球就会震动,这就是我们为什么会发生地震的原因。

I translate your article one by one..You can compare with it by yourself.

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