Misa
3/21/2015 A draft of cold wind brushed me through the half-opened door. I could see a faint greenish glow slipped from the slit of the door. My legs were planted onto the floor and felt rubbery; I was unable to move them at all, even though I hoped I could. Suddenly, the door swung open, a white figure stood behind the door, floating in the air. Suddenly, she extended one of her hands towards me. I couldn't breath, my chest was tightened and my heart was pumping very hard, as if it was about to leap out from my mouth. I could feel her hand was just about to reach me. I closed my eyes and at this very moment, I heard a silvery tinkle of bell sound within the room. "Boom!" the door slammed by its own and everything seemed to stand still. I slowly opened my eyes, and find myself sat on the floor, in the middle of a pool of sweat. Sunlight was pouring from the window. The door was closed.
Mar 21, 2015 5:44 AM
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3/21/2015

A draft of cold wind brushed me through the half-opened door. I could see a faint greenish glow slipped(?) gleaming in the gap of from the slit of<em> (half-opened, it is too big to be a slit)</em> the door. My legs were planted onto the floor and but felt rubbery; I was unable to move them at all, even though I hoped wished I could. Suddenly, the door swung wide open, a white female figure stood behind appeared just outside the door, floating <em>(if it is floating it is not standing!)</em> in the air. Suddenly, she extended one of her hands towards me. I couldn't breathe, my chest was tightened and my heart was pumping very hard, as if it was about to leap out from my mouth. I could feel her hand was just about to reach/touch me. I closed my eyes and at this very moment, I heard a silvery tinkle - a bell - sound within the room. "Boom!" the door slammed by shut of its own accord and everything seemed to stand still.
I slowly opened my eyes, and to find myself seated/sitting on the floor, in the middle of a pool of sweat. Sunlight was pouring from in through the window. The door was closed.

April 1, 2015
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