Edward Malone
Alone at a lake We walked in the forest. When everyone about go home, I decided to continue a walk. I wanted to think about something. Saying good bye to friends, I went to wood lake. Many thoughts came to me that moment. Why? Why is this happening? Many people are angry,cynical and arrogant. They think it make them more powerful. They think that is normal. May be it's normal.Who never saw (or see) the Sun, he feels comfortable in the dark. Why somebody likes this comfort? Why Others do not want that? Many more questions was without of answers. The main thing is not to get a vampire bite :). We need to continue the skip. I took a small stone and threw it to the lake
Mar 27, 2015 5:21 PM
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Alone at a lake

 

We walked in through the forest. When everyone was about to go home, I decided to continue a to walk. I wanted to think about something. Saying good bye to friends, I went to wood lake (is wood lake its name? If so, it must be capitalised <em>Wood Lake, </em>if you mean that the lake was in the woods, then you may say either <em>I continued to the lake in the woods </em>if the lake was in the woods where you were just walking, or <em>I continued to a wooded lake</em> if it is a new lake)
Many thoughts came to me in that moment. Why? Why is this happening? Many people are angry, cynical and arrogant. They think it makes them more powerful. They think that it is normal. Maybe it's normal. He who never saw (or see) has never seen (or <em>never sees) </em>the Sun, he feels comfortable in the dark. Why would somebody likes this comfort? Why do others do not want that? Many more questions was were (because <em>questions</em> is plural) without of answers (never put <em>of </em>after <em>without</em>). The main thing is not to get a vampire bite :). We need to continue <em>the skip (what does this mean? Do you mean like skipping stone? </em>If so, then you need to say: <em>We need to continue on like stones skipping accross the lake</em>). I took a small stone and threw it <em>in to</em> (or <em>accross</em> if you mean skipping stones) the lake.

 

good effort!

March 27, 2015
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