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I have dog once About five years ago, I just dropped out form school. I worked in my cousin's factory, which is in ChangChun. The city is in the northeast China, like west of USA, have a cold winter, wild plain. In the factory, there is a dog, someone gave it to my cousin. But the dog roars each time it saw my cousin. Someone told me, my cousin did something to it, it remembered. But we became friends soon. When I was free, I like walking it. I think it a little stupid, not like other dogs, it don't like play game. It like walking, just walking. There is suburb, someday, there were only I and dog in the area. Then I will release the chain, and it walked, its head slight leaning, like I still hold the chain. I think it's its custom. One day, it's a holiday. Most worker were go home. When I back with the dog, I suddenly decided to remove all the chain in the dog. And want it go to kennel alone. When the dog realized it was totally free, it rushed out suddenly. OMG, the dog was Tibetan Mastiff, most fierceness dog in China. I ran after it, wished can push it back to kennel. The dog ran around, I saw some works in the way, I shouted to them"Don't move", I could feel their fearless. I felt despair for a moment, if it determined to run away, I can do but nothing. Then it ran to its kennel. Yes, it ran to its kennel. Sat down there, looked at me, just liked a kid wait punishment. Oh, dog, you couldn't behave like a man. I left ChangChun soon, and I never see my dog again.
Mar 28, 2015 12:30 PM
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I have dog once

About five years ago, I just dropped out of form school. I worked in my cousin's factory, which is in ChangChun. The city is in the northeast of China, like west of USA. It has cold winters and wild plains.
In the factory, there was a dog. Someone had given it to my cousin. But the dog would bark each time it saw my cousin. Someone told me, my cousin did something to it, and it remembered.
But we became friends soon. When I was free, I liked walking it. I think it was a little stupid. It didn't like to play games like otehr dogs. It liked walking, just walking.
The dog and I were at a suburb one day, and there was no one else in the area. Then I released the chain, and it walked, its head leaning slightly, like I was still holding the chain. I think it was used to it.
One day, it's a holiday. Most of the workers had gone home. When I came back with the dog, I suddenly decided to remove all the dog's chains.
I wanted it to go to the kennel alone. When the dog realized it was totally free, it rushed out suddenly.

OMG, the dog was Tibetan Mastiff, most fierce (or "ferocious") dog in China. I ran after it, hoping to push it back to the kennel. The dog ran around. I saw some workers in the way, I shouted to them"Don't move", I could sense their fear

I felt despair for a moment, if it was determined to run away, there would be nothing I could do.
Then it ran to its kennel. Yes, it ran to its kennel. Sat down there, looked at me, just liked a kid wait punishment. Oh, dog, you couldn't behave like a man.

I left ChangChun soon after that, and I never saw my dog again.

 

写得很好啊,大部分的纠正只是时态的问题,你的意思还是很清楚。

May 13, 2015
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