Lorena
Introduction Hello, my name is Lorena, Iam 34 years old and Iam teacher of PE. I would like improve my english because I need it for my job. I am interested to know people whose are interested improve their spanish.
Mar 31, 2015 6:25 PM
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Introduction

Hello, my name is Lorena, I_am 34 years old and I am a PE teacher. I would like improve my English because I need it for my job. I am interested to know meet people whose who are interested in improving their Spanish. / I'd like to meet people who are interested in improving their Spanish. 


<em>Yellow: corrections</em>

<em>Orange: Capitalization</em>

<em>Blue: A suggestion. You used the word interested twice in the same sentence. That's why I wrote this recommendation. Avoid doing that.</em>

 

Good job! 

March 31, 2015
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Introduction

Hello, my name is Lorena, I'am 34 years old and I'am a teacher of PE. I would like to improve my English because I need it for my job. Also, I shall like knowing people interested in improving their spanish.

March 31, 2015
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Introduction

Hello, my name is Lorena, Iam 34 years old and Iam a PE teacher of PE. I would like to improve my english because I need it for my job. I am interested to in knowing people whose are interested in improving their spanish.

 

Hi Lorena,

few remarks for you

whenever you're talking about jobs, you need to use "a/an" (write few other sentences for your relatives/friends)

be interested in something; be interested in doing something

whose is used when you're talking about possession/having/owning of people/or owned animals (exp: my friend whose hair is blue wants to meet you. If you decompose this sentence: my friend has blue hair (here we're talking about possession)

would like to + verb basic form (please write few other sentences with this form. this is the form of politeness so whenever you need to make a polite request/proposal you can use this form)

 

keep up the good work :)

March 31, 2015
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