Salut tout le monde !
Bonsoir ! Je m'appelle Louise et je suis anglaise, mais je vis en France, à Marseille. Je suis médecin et je travaille dans une clinique. Je suis mariée et je vis avec mon mari. Je voudrais améliorer mon espagnol et , mon néerlandais et surtout peut-être que je pourrais pratiquer mon français, parce qu'il qui est important pour mon travail et pour ma vie ici en France.
<em>Explanations :</em>
You French is very good, and it is difficult to find out that you are not a native speaker. But some mistakes gives us some clues. I am going to be very straight...
The mistakes that should to be corrected are highlighted in orange :
- Unlike English, a space is needed in French before these ponctuation marks: '?', '!', ';', ':'.
- the word "néerlandais" cannot be alone, it looks like it lacks a word in French.
In green, proposals to improve both style and sense to make them more French. So, the sense is not precisely the same, but the idea is to focus on the French language in order to introduce the last part of the sentence more easily. That is why I propose to you to replace "peut-être" by "surtout" ("que je pourrais" could be avoided in both cases), in this way you could use only the word "qui" instead of "parce qu'il", it's believe to sound better.
