Lee HyeonAh
That's what~ I think, there are many stuffs that i want to buy in the world. I like clothes, stationary and smart devices. so, I want to get many many things like them. When i was child, I got allowance from my parents. So, I didn't buy everything what i want. When i was In the middle school, I wanted to get 24 colors pen. My friend has got this. So, I was feel envy her. Because that's what i wanted. I think It was childish memory.
Apr 14, 2015 4:29 AM
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I think, there are many THINGS that i want to buy in the world.
I like clothes, stationary and smart devices.
so, I want to get many things like them.
When i was child, I got allowance from my parents.
So, I didn't buy everything THAT i wantED.
When i was In the middle school, I wanted to get 24 color penS.
BECAUSE My friend haD THEM
So, I feLT ENVIOUS OF her.
Because that's what i wanted.
I think It was A childish FEELING.

 

NOTES:
CAPITALS = CORRECTIONS
• “There are many stuff…” = ‘there are many things’ – is more natural
• Whenever you refer to something that happened in the past, you have to use past tense – ’I want – I wanted’ & ‘she/ he has = She/ he had’ & ‘I feel – I felt’
• “So, I was feel envy her” = I felt envious of her’ OR “I felt envy towards her” Both are more natural to say
• “A childish memory’ = literally = ‘I remember something childish’. ‘A childish feeling’ is better = because you ‘felt envious’, ‘to envy something’ is a feeling, = A childish feeling is better

 

My brother really liked stationary, every year he would have to get a new pencil case, pens, books….everything. I don’t know why ㅎㅎ .
If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.

April 19, 2015
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