Please correct my writing homework :)

Remembering Lesson without understanding (Do you mean you're remembering "Lesson without understanding this"?)

I personally regard think that remembering lessons without understanding is what most of Thai students are being taught to get a good grade, but actually this is only makes Thai children more incompetent. First of all, I think this kind of education does not really make educators recognize lessons. When having an examination, they get are used to remembering memorizing lessons without figuring out. Therefore, the lessons students remember do not remain in their brains for a long time (Something that could sound better: Therefore, the students don't remember their lessons/courses for long. (It sounds less casual)) for sure. Secondly, learners/students cannot find the answer by themselves. How can they solve a problem without textbooks when they have been taught to only memorize? The last reason is the answers of students which are different from the lessons are unaccepted and wrong. Because of fixed responses in books, dissimilar ones are incorrect unreasonably which is unreasonable. However, I believe that thinking differently should be more called creative than amiss. Teaching them how to find an answer is better than telling them what is one. These are the reasons why I cogitate this old-fashioned type of studying can only make students less ability able.

Please correct my writing homework :)

Remembering Lesson without understanding

I personally regard (hold an opinion)that remembering lesson without understanding (to learn by rote)is what most of Thai students being taught to get a good grade(for the purpose of getting a good grade), but actually this is only makes Thai children (students)more incompetent.

First of all, I think this kind of education does not really make educators recognize lessons.(不太明白recognize lesson是什么意思) When having an examination, they (students)get used to remembering lessons without figuring out. (When having an examination, Thai students tend to recall what they have learnt, rather than figure out the question.)Therefore, the lessons students remember do not remain in their brains for long time for sure.(Therefore, once they meet new problems, they cannot solve by themselves.)(我觉得无法长时间记住知识点并不是因为考试习惯于回想所学知识所造成的，所以我把这个句子划掉了。)

Secondly, learners cannot find the answer by themselves. How can they solve a problem without textbooks when they have been taught to only memorize?(Secondly, resulting from such kind of education model, Thai students are less creative......)

The last reason is (that)(在表语从句中，that是不可以省略的) the answers of students which are different from the lessons are unaccepted and wrong. Because of fixed responses in books, dissimilar ones are incorrect unreasonably. However, I believe that thinking differently should be more called creative than amiss. (However, I believe that thinking differently is a way of creative thinking.)Teaching them how to find an answer is better than tell them what is one.

These are the reason why I cogitate this old-fashioned type of studying can only make students less ability.（All in all, to teach students learn only by rote is of no good use for students' development. It would be better to teach they how to learn thus they would become creative.）

to learn by rote: to memorize without comprehending

我觉得你的定语从句用得不错，不过还可以再提高一点，以下是我的建议:

1.可以适当地分段

2.在说明原因的时候，可以恰当地举一些例子，这样更加有说服力

3.在阐述理由时，可以逐渐深入。

4.在结尾时，总结个人观点之后可以再进行升华，或提出可行的建议。

5.词汇可以再多变丰富一点。

(我特意用中文给建议，希望你同时也能学到一点中文。嘻嘻。。。。)