Which sounds better? 1 or 2 1. To mitigate the risk of project failure due to tool unavailability, the availability of all required tools should be ensured early on prior to project implementation to

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Which sounds better? 1 or 2 1. To mitigate the risk of project failure due to tool unavailability, the availability of all required tools should be ensured early on prior to project implementation to allow time for finding alternative approaches should the need arise. 2. Ensuring that all the required tools are available prior to implementation would reduce the risk of tool unavailability and give space to alternative approaches mitigating the risk of project failure.

Apr 18, 2015 5:23 PM

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It is someone's thesis I am editing for them -

April 18, 2015

1. Sounds like a god damn rocket scientist! Haha, it seemed fine, but it has a huge risk of sounding unnatural, and people not understanding what you mean. 2. Sounds very professional, and I'd use it over 1, until you hit the word "mitigating". Mitigating isn't a commonly used word in common the english language, for most of us at least.

April 18, 2015

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