Advantages of living in a big city

I wrote an essay yesterday about the advantages of living in a big city. I think if you live in a big city, you will have a lot of opportunities. People who live in a big city are luckier than people who live in a small city. They (people who live in a big city) can be social in (?) their life because you can find cinemas, there are also galleries and concerts. And a big city's education is better than small city's education because you can find a lot of colleges and universities in a big city. So you can have education from good teachers in a big city. To sum it up, I think IF you live in a big city, you have a lot of opportunities and your life is easier than people who live in a small city's. You can have (?) a lot of thanks. I firmly believe that although living in a big city has a few downsides, it is still beneficial and fun. 

Advantages of living in a big city

I wrote an essay yesterday about advantages of living in a big city. I think If you live in a big city, you will have a lot of opportunities. So People Who live in a big city are luckier than people Who live in a small city. They(people Who lives in a big city) can easily socialize because they can find cinema, theater and guardens . The education in a big city is better than a small city, because you can find a maney colleges, universities in a big city. So you can learn from good teachers in a big city. To sum up, I think If you live in a big city, you have various opportunities and your life maybe easier than people Who live in a small city. I firmly believe that although living in a big city has a few difficulties, it is still beneficial and funny.

Good but not perfect, you need to write the basic elements before begind then rearange your ideas. You should look up any difficult word before writing. Attention, both the introductin and the conclusion are very important. good luck