Presentation Script This is one part of presentation script. I hope you to correct gramatical errors. Thank you, 7. Labelling System As we looked in the table earlier, the problem is there are

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Presentation Script This is one part of presentation script. I hope you to correct gramatical errors. Thank you, 7. Labelling System As we looked in the table earlier, the problem is there are many many mothers do not read the information on the packages. Where does that lead us? Printing informative instruction on packages can be another remedy, because we support the claim that FOL, which stands for Front of Package Labelling, is a potentially vital communication tool for public health, There are a variety of powder milk products have been sold in huge global markets, But few of them have printed warnings of the importance of following the directions on their packages. In order to avoid the incorrect handling of infant formula, it is extremely important to develop the labelling system which includes a warning statement that cautions their infant’s health. On the other hand, illiterate consumers in the Third World cannot receive sufficient benefits from written massages. One solution for this situation is that adapting picture-based warnings. Ok, that’s all I wanted to say about the further protection.

Apr 24, 2015 9:18 AM

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Presentation Script

This is one part of presentation script.
I hope you will correct gramatical errors.
Thank you,

7. Labelling System
As we looked at the table earlier, the problem is there are many, many mothers who do not read the information on the packages. Where does that lead us? Printing informative instructions on packages can be another remedy solution, because we support the claim that FPL, which stands for Front of Package Labelling, is a potentially vital communication tool for public health, There are a variety of powder milk products that have been sold in huge global markets, But few of them have printed warnings of the importance of following the directions on their packages.

In order to avoid the incorrect handling of infant formula, it is extremely important to develop the labelling system which includes a warning statement that cautions their infant’s health. On the other hand, illiterate consumers in the Third World cannot receive sufficient benefits from written massages. One solution for this situation is to create picture-based warnings. Ok, that’s all I wanted to say about the further protection.

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Hello, Satomi!

Your English is clear and very well written, I fixed a couple of things that a lot of people struggle with to make it sound more fluid, but other than that, it's impressively done!

April 24, 2015