Farhan
Labor Day The Labor Day on 1st march 1886 is celebrated all around the world in the remembrance of Chicago labor force who stood up against the capitalists of that time for paying them low wages despite of forcing them work for 12 hours. People gather around the globe for paying tribute to the Chicago laborers who sacrificed their today for the better tomorrow of generations of laborers to come. They demanded for increased pay and decrease working hours, from 12 hours to 8 hours. The uprising against capitalist was due to bad condition of laborers, suffering from chronic diseases and inadequate income to manage home expenses, pay utility bills and provide for education to their children. Similar situation is of laborers today that prevailed in late nineteenth century, the Capitalists are exploiting the basic rights, such as health, safety and security, of the labor force which are financially too weak to stand on their own. Their work is tougher and more dangerous than others’ work, demands safety and a lot of energy. Laborers are the pillars of nation which build the infrastructure of country and play an important role in its development and prosperity. It is public holiday but for the people, this day is being celebrated would be busy in doing their work, for them is no Sunday or holiday, for them it is always working day. In fact, they suffer the most amongst all. Government doesn’t pay attentions to their woes and work for their betterment. Labor massacre: Recently, twenty workers hailing from Punjab and Sindh were gunned down by Nationalists in Baluchistan. What was the fault of poor workers? That they had to pay their lives because of the unjust policies of government in the province. They simply came from far to earn bread and butter for their families.
May 4, 2015 11:58 AM
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Labor Day

The Labor Day which first took place on 1st march 1886 is celebrated all around the world in the remembrance of the Chicago labor force who which stood up against the capitalists of that time for paying them low wages despite of forcing them to work for 12 hours a day. People gather around the globe for paying to pay tribute to the Chicago laborers who sacrificed their today lives for the a better tomorrow of for generations of laborers to come. They demanded for increased pay and decreased working hours, from 12 hours to 8 hours. The uprising against the capitalists was due to the bad conditions of the laborers were put through, suffering causing them to suffer from chronic diseases and inadequate income to manage home living expenses, pay utility bills and to provide for education to for their children. Similar situation is of Some laborers today are in similar situations that prevailed in late nineteenth century. The capitalists are exploiting the laborers, who are financially too weak to stand on their own, denying them their basic rights, such as their health, safety and security. of the labor force which are financially too weak to stand on their own. Their work is tougher and more dangerous than others’ work that of others, and demands risking their safety and spending a lot of energy. Laborers are the nation's pillars, of nation which build the infrastructure of the country and play an important role in its development and prosperity. It is a public holiday but for those people, this day is being celebrated they would be busy in doing their work, for them as there is no Sunday or holiday for them. for them It is always working a work day. In fact, they suffer the most amongst all. The government doesn’t does not pay attentions to their woes and work do nothing for their the betterment of their working conditions.
Labor massacre:
Recently, twenty workers hailing from Punjab and Sindh were gunned down by Nationalists in Baluchistan. What was the fault of those poor workers? that They had to pay with their lives because of for the unjust policies of the government in the province. They simply came from afar to earn bread and butter for their families.

Notes:
– you don't have to put an article before holiday names. Just like we do not call Christmas "the Christmas", "Labor day" will suffice :)
– you use "who" to refer to people, and "which" to refer to nouns excluding people. A "labor force" is an object, even though it is made up of people. Hence, we use "which" and not "who".
– there is no plural for "pay attention". So it is not "pay attentions".
– you still forget articles (a/the) sometimes, but I can see it has gotten much better! You are starting to add articles now :D
– you have problems with sentence structuring. Try to structure your sentences in a way that makes the flow smoother.
– you also have a slight problem with distinguishing when to use "to" and "for". I'll try to find some notes to help you with that!

Overall, a nice piece of writing! :) Good job, keep it up!

May 4, 2015
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