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Health or wealth Health or wealth Health and wealth are very important things in our lives. Many people think wealth is more important than health. If someone has enough money he can buy anything in his life. Many people try to have good relationship with him because he is rich. There are many people like rich people. In my opinion health is the most the important thing in our lives. When you get sick, you could pay all your money just to recover. But no one is ready to lose his health for money. Finally, I can say health is more important than wealth. Do not you think so?
May 22, 2015 7:00 PM
Corrections · 2
Hello my friend, Thanks so much for your corrections
May 29, 2015
'If someone has enough money *they* can buy anything in *their* (plural possessive) life. You can use masculine and/or feminine exclusively, but I would start the corresponding sentence: 'If a man has enough...' Not something neutral like 'If someone has enough money..." and then transitioning into gender specifics in the same sentence. I like the second paragraph, and I agree health is more valuable than wealth. Your last sentence, you open with 'Finally....' as if it was in conjunction with a structured argument or hypothesis. Or, listing off a wide number of things in different manners. Example: "First we went here, then we went there before going away. Around the block, then down the street. Finally, we arrived at home." I have a feeling you know many of the words and meanings you just have not practiced actual conversation very much-- I didn't see one incorrect spelling. Awesome work my friend!
May 27, 2015
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