Jennifer 💁‍♀️
Disagreement I asked my parents for admittment that I wanted to left the school dormitory and rent an apartment surrounding school with a classmate who got along with me very well. Unexpectably,my mother didn't allow me to move away from the school dormitory. Because she thought it was too dangerous to rent an apartment outside the school. I tried to persuade her in many ways. But she insisted her point no matter what I said. I got very angery finally and almost quarreled with her. I didn't talk to until she said she would consider about it.
May 23, 2015 12:52 PM
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Disagreement

I asked my parents for permission to leave the school dormitory and rent an apartment close to the  school with a classmate who I got along with very well. Unexpectably,my mother didn't allow me to move away from the school dormitory because she thought it was too dangerous to rent an apartment outside the school. I tried to persuade her in many ways. But she insisted on her point no matter what I said. I got very angry finally and almost quarrelled with her. I didn't talk to her until she said she would consider it.

 

Hello Jenna,

I have made a few corrections to  your text. Please don't be too angry with your mother. You are still her little child and will be for many years to come. She wants you to be safe because she loves you. The best thing you can do is ask her if she can come and help you choose the apartment so she can check the area and hopefully put her mind at rest.

 

Hope this helps

May 23, 2015
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