My English Teacher

My English teacher is a British man named Chris. He comes from Manchester. He is social，enthusiastic and has a rich knowledge and passion for creating free English speaking environment. His dream is to become a photographer. Sometimes he would show us his photos, including wild life and people. I even saw an old and wrinkled women and he seemed very satisfied with it. He liked to tell us the stories behind the photos. Before he came to China, he had studied as a chef in a five -star hotel in France for 7 years. He cooked very delicious food. I still remember the Christmas dinner he cooked for us two years ago. The food tasted perfect! Especially the dish named "Bacon-rapped Apricots with Sage", which was fantastic, none of us had ever eaten something like that before. That night even the roasted turkey was very nice . Later he made a hot Christmas Pudding which is a traditional British dessert , he poured brandy onto the heated pudding and a beautiful flame arose. Someone even said "even if you don't like meat you would love the meat served at this Christmas dinner" . We also exchanged gifts under the Christmas tree and received a lot of surprises. Everybody was so excited that night, a man suddenly stood up and asked us to hold up our wineglasses. We then cheered "for Chris "!
Chris is a perfectionist, in order to prepare Christmas dinner for 30 people, he didn't sleep all the night before. He is very serious about everything. The activities in our English class were pretty good, there were a lot of activities，including: skill training, culture introducing and having fun. It attracted many people to take part. Chris also learnt lots about China. He understood Chinese and seldom spoke it with us , but his pronouciation was quite standard. Some of us thought that maybe his Chinese was better than our English. He could play zheng, a typical Chinese old instrument with over 20 strings, playing it would create a wonderful echo.

My English Teacher

My English teacher is a British man named Chris. He comes from Manchester. He is social, enthusiastic, and has a rich knowledge and passion for creating free English corner (sorry, I don't know what you want to say here!). His dream is to become a photographer. Sometimes he showed us his photos, including still life and people, and I even saw an old and wrinkled women in the photo, and he seemed very satisfied at by it. He liked to tell us the stories behind the photos. Before he came to China, he had studied as a chef in a five-star hotel in France for 7 years. He cooked very delicious food. I still remembered the Christmas dinner he cooked for us two years ago. The food tasted perfect! Especially the dish named called "Bacon-rapped Apricots with Sage," which was fantastic and we hadn't eaten it before. That night, even the roasted turkeys were also very nice good (you cannot use the word "nice" to describe the taste of food). Later he made a hot Christmas Pudding as traditional British dessert. He poured brandy into the heated pudding, and it started a beautiful flame. Someone commented like this:,"Even if you didn't like meat, you would love meat it since you tired because it was from the Christmas dinner here. We also exchanged gifts under the Christmas tree and got a lot of surprises. Everybody was so excited that night. A man suddenly standed up and asked us holding high wineglass following him cheering: "for Chris "!  A man suddenly stood up with his wineglass held high, and asked us to join him in cherring for Chris. 
Chris is a completist (I have never heard of this word as a native English speaker) man. In order to prepare for 30 person's a 30 person Christmas dinner, he didn't sleep all the that night at all. He is very serious on doing with everything he does. The activities in our English corner were pretty good, and there were a lot of activities，including: skill training, cultural introducing introductions and having fun. It attracted many people to take part in Many people were interested in taking part in it. Chris learnt (In the United States, we spell this like "learned") lots about China. He understood Chinese and but seldom spoke it with us, but his pronouciation was quite standard (I think a better word would be "ordinary," but standard is okay). Some of us guessed that maybe his Chinese was better than our English. He could play zheng, a typical Chinese old instrument with over 20 strings, and playing it would have has a wonderful echo.

Very good! Sometimes commas were used incorrectly and sometimes you forgot to put conjunctions in sentences (but, and, etc.), which connects two separate thoughts. I also made some suggestions that sound more natural. You also used the phrase "English corner." I do not understand this, but I think you mean "club." The word club describes a group that does activities together.