Redaction on: Explain the factors that might influence your career choice

People have problems with this theme because it isn't very easy to choose among careers (or 'a career'). I think that we must be honest, and we should write down two professions that we like. We should explore the advantages and disadvantages among all of them (to say '...disadvantages of them all' or '...between them.' would sound better but what you wrote is still good.). For example, we can find out their outputs(?), works(?), etc. The subjects of all careers are important too because we should be able to learn for we overcome any barrier.(?)
At the moment whose we are doing a choice, this choice will have to like because probably the election will be our job or maybe not.(?)
Anyway, on average we must to feel proud and satisfied with our decisions in life.

Good job! The (?) is where i think you should either use a different word (like for 'outputs' or 'works') or where i don't understand what you're trying to say in the sentence. Overall it's a good effort!

Redaction on: Explain the factors that might influence your career choice

People have problems with this theme because it isn't very easy to choose among careers. I think that we must be honest, after which we should write down some professions that we like. We should discuss the advantages and disadvantages of all of them. For example, we can find out their outputs, works, etc. The subjects of all careers are important too because we should be able to learn <em>for we overcome any barrier.</em> (?)
At the moment in which we make a choice, this choice <em>will have to like because probably the election will be our job or maybe not.</em> (?)
Anyway, on average we must to feel proud and satisfied with our decisions in life.

Good job!!

Sorry I couldn't correct everything, I had some difficulties understanding :c

Anyway, overall you did a pretty good job!