something real ! It all began the first day of college, I remember that day so clear I woke up early, had breakfast, and got ready for going to my new universe of school. The class started and some

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something real ! It all began the first day of college, I remember that day so clear I woke up early, had breakfast, and got ready for going to my new universe of school. The class started and something caught my eye, that something was a girl, she was the most beautiful girl I had ever seen , she was tall, she had straight and long hair, a clear and white complexion, a slim body and two cute brow eyes. When I saw her for the first time, I thought I had found a treasure, I had found the allegory of beauty turned into a someone. I greeted her, she greeted back, and there started the history of my destruction. ´´She has 7 brothers and her dad , they overprotect her all the time, she is not allowed to have a boyfriend, she cannot go out with male friends. Once she had a boyfriend behind her relatives eyes , but this guy cheated her , he kissed the best friend of this girl. We will call her ´´A´´, she is shy, she is the kind of girl who doesn’t participate in class, who prefers to seat in the last seat in the class room , the girl who doesn’t study too much , that kind of girl that if you don’t start the conversation she doesn’t talk to you , the kind of girl who is always far away in her own world, who always feels like to sleep, the kind of girl that you don’t know her voice because she doesn’t talk, who doesn’t believe in love, who doesn’t like corny guys of cheesy things , the girl who likes anime but seems not to know too much about it. ´´ Firstly we were friends, but I kept in mind my intentions, progressively we had something abstract that only we could understand. We were not a couple but we were not just friends either, we were in the middle line. After some time I asked her If she wanted to be my girlfriend and she said yes. I was happy, we had never kissed each other, during this little period of relationship she never let me to kiss her. It lasted two days. One of these two days I tried to kiss her in the bus station , but she moved her face avoiding me I tried to kissed anyway and hit her ear. The worst was that there were many people there and some of my class mates who saw the scene. I was disappointed, sad and a little bit angry, ´´you are so cheesy´´ she said, ´´ you are not ´´ I replied her, that afternoon my while I was cooking my cellphone rang , It was a girl who said she has seen me in the university and apparently she liked me ... to be continued ...

May 29, 2015 3:27 PM

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something real !

It all began on (on is not required here but it "feels" better) the first day of college, I remember that day so clearly. I woke up early, had breakfast, and got ready for going to go to my new universe of school (maybe "life at school" is what you mean? or just "university"?). The class started and something caught my eye, that something was a girl. She was the most beautiful girl I had ever seen: she was tall, she had straight and long hair, a clear and white complexion, a slim body and two cute brown eyes. When I saw her for the first time, I thought I had found a treasure, I had found the allegory of beauty turned into a someone(this isn't needed, but you could say "in human form").
I greeted her, she greeted me back, and there started the history ("began the story" might be better) of my destruction.
She has 7 brothers and her a dad they (this works but "who" may be better) overprotect her all the time. She is not allowed to have a boyfriend, she cannot go out with male friends. Once she had a boyfriend behind her relatives eyes backs, but this guy cheated on her. He kissed the her best friend of this girl.
We will call her "A". She is shy, she is the kind of girl who doesn’t participate in class, who prefers to seat sit in the last seat in the class room. The girl who doesn’t study too much, that kind of girl that if you don’t start the conversation she doesn’t ("wouldn't" is better) talk to you. The kind of girl who is always far away in her own world, who always feels like to sleep sleeping, the kind of girl that you don’t know her voice because she doesn’t talk, who doesn’t believe in love, who doesn’t like corny guys of or/who say (I'm not sure which one you mean exactly) cheesy things , the girl who likes anime but seems not to know too much about it.
Firstly we were just (emphasizes non-romantic) friends, but I kept in mind my intentions, progressively and going forward we had something abstract that only we could understand. We were not a couple but we were not just friends either, we were in on the middle line (or "in between" or "in the middle"). After some time I asked her If she wanted to be my girlfriend and she said yes. I was happy, we had never kissed each other, during this little period of the relationship she never let me to kiss her. It lasted two days. One of these two days I tried to kiss her in the bus station, but she moved her face avoiding me, but I tried to kissed her anyway and hit her ear. The worst part was that there were many people there. Some of them were my class mates, and they who saw the scene. I was disappointed, sad and a little bit angry, "you are so cheesy," she said. "you are I am not," I replied her responded. That afternoon my while I was cooking my cellphone rang, It was a girl who said she has seen me in the university and apparently she liked me ... to be continued ...