Sell Icecream

Hello everyone, last time, I wrote how to do business, but I can not find in here, so I will write it again 

The Summer is coming soon in China,so I have decided to sell ice cream. Nearby my home has is an ice cream shop that sells very good ice cream. The ice cream is not only flavoursome very good but also very cheap, so I want to join the icecream business. When this idea in my brain grew up, I decided to go ahead and do it.

 
At First I hadve to look for a good place,so I decided sell it in 外滩. 外滩 is very famous street in 宁波，(I will live in NingBo, when I graduate from school). The important income for WanTan St is bar sales. Many foreigners like to come here to sit, chat and so on. I found a bar and shared said my idea with to the boss. That day he had drunk alot/he was drunk and drunk very much,only said add my whchat (Not sure what you mean here). The next day he contacted me he,so when I went  back, I contace he use we chatted. He said to me the ice cream machine must have to fit with his bar's design. have to After all the conditions are fulfilled, he will be consider my proposal. The most important condition is that, from all the income, I have to give he him 50 percent. Now my head is a mess. What should I do? Should I do business? let me have the passion to find direction.

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