Minji
writing task 2 Most schools offer some type of physiccal education program to thier students. Why is physical education important? Should physical education classes be required or optional? These days, Many people are tend to prefer about health care like healthy diet and excercise, increasing obesity rate and variety disease. But because of overstretched budget and timetable, There are many argument about manating physical excercise at school. Physical eduation can improve student's fitness level. So they can get a higher concentration. Also physical education can makes students let off their steam and get a better study efficiency. A physical education makes it easy to get a sleep in class or study because physical eduation is quite active so can make student tired. There are many method to improve health without class in school. Not only some pupils sho are not good at sports could be bullied and rediculed by peers in school but also they are likely to los interest in sports for life. On the other hand, It is difficult to take part in variety physical programmes in after shool as well as parents want their children to learn about schoolarly education ,not physical. Through the excercise, children become more phsically active and can avoid sedentary life an effective way to tackle rising obesity. To include,It can makes student feel tiredness ,be bullied and rediculed by freinds in some case. However,physical education is good for incrasing student's health and it is helpful to reduce obesity rate. So i think physical education shoud be compursory for children.
Jun 3, 2015 1:48 PM
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writing task 2

Most schools offer some type of physical education programme* to their students. Why is physical education important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?

These days, many people tend to care about their health like a healthy diet, exercise, the increasing obesity rate and variety of diseases. But because of overstretched budgets and timetables, there are many arguments about managing physical exercise at school.
Physical education can improve a student's fitness level, so they can have a higher concentration level. Also physical education can help students let off some steam and become more efficient at studying. Too much physical education could cause a student to sleep in class or study less because physical education is quite active so can make student tired. There are many methods to improve health without class in school. Some pupils who are not as good at sports could be bullied and ridiculed by their peers in school but also they are likely to lose interest in sports for life.
On the other hand, it is difficult to take part in varied physical education programme after school as well as parents want their children to spend time learning, not playing sports. learn about schoolarly education ,not physical. Through exercise, children would become more physically active and can avoid sedentary life. This is also an effective way to tackle rising obesity.

To conclude, physical education can make students feel tired and even cause them to be bullied and ridiculed in some cases. However, physical education is good for improving a student's health and it is would help to reduce the rising obesity rate. So think physical education should be compulsory for children.

 

Programme in British English which I presume you want to use since you used programmes later on.


A lot of the spelling mistakes in the essay are repeated throughout, for example eduation - education, excercise - exercise. You also don't need to use a capital letter after a comma, for example on the other hand, It - on the other hand, it. Sometimes writing into a word processor such as Microsoft Word or Google Docs can help iron out some of these basic mistakes. Just make sure you remember to set the language to English.

In a conclusion you don't want to refer to the subject you are talking about as "it".

June 3, 2015
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