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THE CHILI COOK OUT THE CHILI COOK OUT There once lived a little boy named McGee, and there next to his side were his enemy Jordan. McGee often called Jordan butt squat, and his friends were Gretchen and Squirt. McGee said that they were going to have a chili cook off with his worst enemy butt squat. McGee said that he would win if butt squat will not resist. McGee tried his best to practice cooking and he one day cooked the most delicious chili that everybody had ever tasted. Butt squat said that it was delicious but he also tried to practice and every body said that Jordan’s chili was better than McGee’s. McGee said that his was better. So McGee tried to practice again and again, and I will tell you the winner is McGee. Here is how he won the cook off. McGee got the same ingredients and the same things he used and did the exact same thing as he did before, but Jordan did what he had done before but he ran out of sugar, so he used salt instead. So once everybody tasted it they thought that he had put some beetles inside. Butt squat how he could ever do that. Gretchen said that he could go and try it for himself, so Jordan did, and he felt that McGee’s was very delicious, and he tried his and said that it had too much salt. Jordan said that McGee tasted his, so McGee did, and he thought it was good but a little sour. He gave butt squat some steps and butt squat did those steps, then Jordan said thank you to McGee, then he set off to do more cook offs. Now McGee and Jordan became best friends now; and never had any trouble on that day long. The moral of this story is that when people do things remember to tell them what they are wrong. Once you told him they will be happy; then they will try to be your friend. That is a tip to make a friend.
Jun 21, 2015 3:46 PM
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THE CHILI COOK OFF


There once lived a little boy named McGee and his friends were Gretchen and Squirt., One day he found himself sitting next to his side were his enemy Jordan. McGee often called Jordan "Butt Squat". McGee said that they were going to have a chili cook off with his worst enemy Butt Squat. McGee said that he would win if Butt Squat did not resist. McGee tried his best to practice cooking and he one day cooked the most delicious chili that anyone had ever tasted. 

Butt Squat said that it was delicious, but he also started practicing and soon everybody said that Jordan’s chili was better than McGee’s. McGee said that his was better. So McGee tried to practiced again and again, and I will tell you the winner was McGee.
Here is how he won the cook off. McGee got the same ingredients and the same things he used and did the exact same thing as he did before, but Jordan did what he had done before but he ran out of sugar, so he used salt instead. So once everybody who tasted it they thought that he had put some beetles inside. Butt Squat wondered how he could ever do that. Gretchen said that he could go and try it for himself, so Jordan did, and he felt that McGee’s was very delicious, and he tried his and said that it had too much salt.
Jordan said that McGee should taste his, so McGee did, and he thought it was good but a little sour. He gave Butt Squat some advice and Butt Squat did those steps, after which Jordan said thank you to McGee. Then he set off to do more cook offs. Now McGee and Jordan became best friends now; and never had any trouble from that day on.
The moral of this story is that when people do things remember to tell them what they are doing wrong. Once you have told hhem they will be happy; then they will try to be your friend. That is a tip to make a friend.

 

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