Mavis
What I am thinking now it's raining outside. The whether is not so good. and it bring some influence on my minds. I feel depressed. Besides, I think a lot about my life. I just come back from school. In other words, my summer vocation is beginning. but I am not really happy about it . Because I don't know how to spend it. I used to complain about that I don't have enough time to do someting I want. but now, I am also feeling confused. someone told me that "it's not the hours that you put in your work, but the work that you put in your hours " Now I just think I am wasting my time. I change nothing. Crisp, What happened to me?
Jun 29, 2015 3:55 PM
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What I am thinking now

It's raining outside. The whether is not so good. and it brings some influence in my mind. I feel depressed. Besides, I think a lot about my life. I just came back from school. In other words, my summer vacation is beginning but I am not really happy about it . Because I don't know how to spend it. I used to complain that I don't have enough time to do things I want. But now, I am also feeling confused. someone told me that "it's not the hours that you put in your work, but the work that you put in your hours ". Now I just think I am wasting my time. I change nothing. Crisp, What happened to me?

 

Hope my correction is good. This is my first time doing one. You're very good at writing :) Keep up the good work! 

June 29, 2015
@purvak Thanks for your correction, purvak. it's very kind of you. of course I know you are not tense to me. Maybe I need to work hard to improve my writing. that's not so good. Uh
June 29, 2015
@sabino that's a good suggestion. playing guitar is also my favorite. I have been learning it for a year. But I am still not good at playing guitar. I will try it anyway. Thank you.
June 29, 2015
Dear mavis, nice try on writing. Here's some words correction. Remember...It's not about tense because i don't fully understand it till now. >it's raining outside. The whether is not so good and it bring some influence on my minds. I feel depressed. Besides, I think a lot about my life. I just came back from school. In other words, my summer vacation is beginning. But I am not really happy about it . Because I don't know how to spend it. I used(need, supposed) to complain about that "I don't have enough time to do something that I want." but now, I am also feeling confused. someone told me that "It's not the hours that you put in your work, but the work that you put in your hours " Now I just think I am wasting my time. I change nothing. Crisp, What happened to me?<
June 29, 2015
hi! during your holidays, you could learn to do somethings like to play an instrument or to do some sport. I decided to learn to play guitar and now it is my favourite hobby. Bye!
June 29, 2015
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