"Walking in the rain" would you like to correct this for me, please? "Walking in the rain" One day in winter I was watching tv, it was raining and the day was completely grey. I was very bored,then

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"Walking in the rain" would you like to correct this for me, please? "Walking in the rain" One day in winter I was watching tv, it was raining and the day was completely grey. I was very bored,then I switched off my TV, I took my umbrella and I decided to go out. I went to the gardin bank of the river, some people also were walking. I was walking in the rain , feeling the raindrops falling off my umbrella and especially I could breathe so good,everything was quite.... when suddenly , a boys stopped in front of me, and he stared me, then he asked me if I Knew him, my answer was that I had not seen before , I mean I didn't know him.Then he began to sing and whistle.It couldn't believe! the strange boys was my first boy, I couldn't reconigze because his apparence had changed so much, after thar we both were remembering our positive thing of old relationship, since that day , We keep in touch a day a week. By the way I guess you shouldn't say that you wouldn't drink the same water again . I suppose is the life!

Jun 30, 2015 11:59 AM

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"Walking in the rain" would you like to correct this for me, please?

"Walking in the rain"
One day in winter WHILE I was watching TV, it was raining and the day was completely grey. I was very bored, then I switched off my TV, I took my umbrella(,) and I decided to go out.
I went to the gardEn BY THE RIVERBANK, WHERE some people were ALSO walking.
I was walking in the rain, feeling the raindrops falling off my umbrella and(,) especially(,) I could breathe so WELL, everything was quite....
Suddenly, a boy stopped in front of me, and he stared me, then he asked me if I knew him. My answer was that I had not seen HIM before. I mean(,) I didn't know him. Then he began to sing and whistle. I couldn't believe IT! The strange boy was my first boyFRIEND. I couldn't reconigze HIM because his appEarence had changed so much. After thaT we both REMEMBERED THE positive thingS ABOUT OUR old relationship. sAince that day, we HAVE KEPT/KEPT in touch ONCE PER WEEK/ONE DAY EACH WEEK. By the way(,) I guess you shouldn't say that you wouldn't drink the same water again. I suppose THAT THIS IS life!

June 30, 2015

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