Shame I graduated from university this June. My mother came to visit me. At the very first sight of my little cube in the dorm, she said, with a peculiar tone,"Are you living in a trashbin?" Well,

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Shame I graduated from university this June. My mother came to visit me. At the very first sight of my little cube in the dorm, she said, with a peculiar tone,"Are you living in a trashbin?" Well, I am not very good at organizing things...to be more exact, not at all good at. My mother couldn't tolerate it and she helped me organize, clean and pack all those things scattering around. I felt very shameful, for the inability to manage our own stuff. I felt that I was still a little kid./ (I felt like a little kid?) I asked my mom when she learned to organize things and she said that was after marriage. Grey wisps have climbed up her hair and I am still unable to live independently. What a shame. Hope one day I can turn a new leaf. Thank you for any corrections!

Jun 30, 2015 3:56 PM

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Shame

I graduated from the university this June. My mother Mom 亲切些 came to for a visit me. At the very first sight of my little cube tiny cubicle in the dorm, she said, with blurted out in a peculiar tone,_"Are you living in a trash_bin?"

Well, I am not very good at organizing things..._To be more exact, not good at all good at. My Mother 在种情况下, 嚴重的辞句很适合 couldn't cannot stand/tolerate. it and She helped me started to organize, clean and pack away all those that came in her way. Me, of course helping meekly. things scattering around. 这样写, 灵活些而对读者觉得有趣. 你是在描写一个故事, 不是發情報 :)

I felt very ashamed, a grown up girl and still unable for the inability to manage our my own stuff. I felt that I was still a little kid./ (I felt like a little kid?) 这两句都正确

I asked my mom when she learned to organize things. and She said that was replied, "After marriage."

Grey wisps have climbed up her hair and I am still unable to live independently. 我明白你的意思, 她的白髮是指你長大了... 不过英文文化不是这样表示, 英文读者先会觉得一头雾水 What a shame. Here I am all grown up and mom's greying hair creeping up on her, I still act like a child. Alas!

Hope one day 語气沒有恆心I can turn a new leaf. 这句太嚴重了, 你沒犯錯.I must become an adult in her eyes.

Good story and essay. If I don't understand, I cannot correct. Good work.

Thank you for any corrections!

June 30, 2015

Shame

I graduated from university this June. My mother came to visit me. At the very first sight of my little cube in the dorm, she said, with a peculiar tone, "Are you living in a trashbin?"

Well, I am not very good at organizing things...to be more exact, not at all good at I'm not good at it at all. My mother couldn't tolerate it and she helped me organize, clean, and pack all those the things that were scattered around.

I felt very shameful/ashamed for the inability to manage our my own stuff. I felt that I was still a little kid./ (I felt like a little kid?) They both work, but I would go with eith second one.

I asked my mom when it was that she learned how to organize things, and she said that it was after marriage.

Grey wisps have climbed up into her hair and I am still unable to live independently. What a shame.

I hope that one day I can turn over a new leaf.

Thank you for any corrections!